E-BOOK VS PAPER BOOK
In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?
People nowadays are increasingly deciding to read digital books rather than handbooks. I strongly believe that using e-books will be beneficial to the readers due to its practicality as well as the environment, although some believe it comes along with a certain health issue.
The development of technology introduces a new way of presenting literature known as an electronic book, which has two main benefits. Firstly, this method provides readers a more practical way of gathering information from books, allowing them to bring their books more easily. For example, students often find it hard to bring all of the paper resources they need, which is normally large and heavy, to attend the lecture. By using e-books, however, it is possible for them to bring countless books stored in a small electronic device, such as phone. Moreover, the change from paper to digital books will obviously decrease the paper usage and thus saving natural resources and protecting the world ecosystem.
On the other hand, some view that reading an electronic book causes eye problems. The reason behind this is that it has a small display screen and emits a harmful radiation to the eye. That activity is not just the one to blame though. Reading a paper book excessively in the dark, for instance, also lead to the similar problem. With regards to this, as long as the reader maintain a good reading habit, the effect can be prevented, I suppose.
To sum up, digital books bring positive impacts on both people and surroundings. People today have a chance to read books effectively without wasting any paper through e-books. Unfortunately, there is a speculation that reading e-books might be harmful, but I see that its effect is minor.
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The corrections below focus on conciseness and grammar, not the strength of the argument:
People nowadays are increasingly deciding choose to read ...
... e-books will be more beneficial to ... practicality, as well as to the environment, although some ... health issue. However, there are indications that e-books may have negative health effects.
Firstly, this method ("method" is not a proper description for e-books) e-books provides readers with a more ... books, allowing them to ... easily making it portable and easier to access. ... to bring all of the paper resources they need, which is ... heavy, to attend the lectures, due to the inconvenience of physical weight or volume. ... for them to bring (carry?) countless books ..., such as a phone. ... decrease the paper usage and, thus saving ...
On the other hand, some view there are indications that reading ... ... is that e-books have it has ("it" here sounds like you are referring to eye problems instead of e-books) a small display screen and emits a ...
... for instance, could also lead to a the similar problem. ... the negative health effect can be prevented, I suppose. (You are presenting an argument. "I suppose" indicates lack of confidence)
To sum up, digital books bring have strong positive ...
Holt Educational Consultant - / 15385 While your line of reasoning is correct in the essay, your response to the prompt question is improper. You see, this is a comparative analysis essay. However, the comparison comes with a specific instruction that you choose a specific side to support in the 2 body reasoning paragraphs. You were asked if you believe that the advantages of eBooks outweigh the disadvantages. So the response should have been:
Based on 2 comparative factors, I believe that the help offered by the eBooks are greater than the problems that using it poses.
What you said was: I strongly believe that using e-books will be beneficial to the readers due to its practicality as well as the environment, although some believe it comes along with a certain health issue.
Since this is not a degree of dis/agreement essay, your response will be considered incorrect as it shows that you did not understand the correct format for the response. Points will be deducted from the TA score because of this error. Remember, in the paraphrase, your restate the prompt and answer the question. Nothing more is required from you. At that point, your English comprehension skills are being tested, so prove that you understand English instructions and that you are capable of explaining English discussion points in your own words. Your own words have to reflect the correct topic and reason for discussion elements. That is why you only have 5 sentences to use in the paragraph. The actual discussion starts after the comprehension skills test.
Never use terms of uncertainty in this essay. "I suppose" indicates that you do not really believe what you are saying. It creates a tangential response which could adversely affect your TA score.