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A record audience is expected to watch tonight's presidential debate


mdamanhuri77 22 / 35 3  
Sep 27, 2016   #1
Over 100 million inhabitans are hoped presenting the firts presidential open debate beetwen Hillary Clinton and Donald Trump. Most spectators will fulfill the capacity of the place where it will take place. In 1960, the firts debate in television between John Kennedy and Richard Nixon were wtched by 70 million US citizens.

According to kennedy, the debate was the condition to find out and breakthrough. The most valuable issue was a compulsory of televission growth. Nixon was estimated by listeners of radio to be better candidate, who the best candidate for the US Citizens. He regulate a rule of debates when he became candidate again in 1968 and 1972. After that the pattern of the debate this candidates used again in 1976.

Recently, the debate as the center of president campaign. The debates beetwen baragck Obama and Mitt Romney was watched around 67 million spectators and became the most favorite debate in 20 years. If this debate(beetwen Hillary and Trump) is attended by 100 million people, it will be a powerfull viewing figures.

Yonathan 46 / 65 5  
Sep 27, 2016   #2
Hi Mdamanhuri
Let me give you some advice

Over 100 million inhabitans(citizens) are hoped presenting the firts ...
In 1960, the firts(first) debate in television (..) were wtched(watched) by 70 million US citizens.

.. was a compulsory of televission(television) growth.
He regulate a (set of) rule of(on) debates when he became ...
... it will be a powerfull(powerful) viewing figures.

Your summary are quite good but many misspelled word
You should double-checked you summary
Thank you...
RAY93 35 / 186 136  
Sep 27, 2016   #3
Over 100 million inhabitans are hoped presenting ...

this is your sentence. on the article it is written:
SOME 100m people are expected to tune in to the first presidential debate between Hillary Clinton and Donald Trump tonight......i can tell how similar your own sentence with the source. need to learn how to paraphrase more instead of only change some words.

again, this is from the article:The first televised debate, between John Kennedy and Richard Nixon in 1960, was watched by 70m people.while you wrote:

In 1960, the firts debate in television between John Kennedy...

According to kennedy[capitalization issue],
the debate was the condition to find out and breakthrough. [to find out what? incomplete information]

Nixon was estimated by listeners of radioradio listeners to bethe better candidate, who the best candidate for the US Citizens.despite of repetitively mention the same words, why do not you just write : ....to be the better candidate for the US citizens

He regulateD a rule of.....

After that[need comma] the pattern of the debate this candidates used again in 1976.

Recently, the debate as the center of president campaign. =no verb


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