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Recuirtment of teachers in Ontario; the percentage of English-language tutors had a downward trend



putri22 33 / 32  
Feb 28, 2016   #1
Information about the recruitment of English and French-language teachers in Ontario from 2001 to 2007 is illustrated in the line graph. Overall, it can obviously be seen that even though it saw a decrease in the beginning of the period, the percentage of French-language teachers had an upward tendency. However, the percentage of English-language teachers had a downward tendency.

According to the data, in the beginning of the period English-language instructors stood at virtually 75%, higher than French-language tutors (70%) then it declined sharply in the next two years to two-fifths. In contrast, French-language teachers stood at seven in ten and reached a trough of roughly a half before it rose markedly to almost 70% in 2003. In spite of some fluctuations in the next following years, the recruitment of French-language tutors finally reached a high of approximately 73% at the end of the period while the demand of English-language instructors hit a low of less than a third.


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justivy03 - / 2265  
Mar 1, 2016   #2
Hi Alifah, I'd like to share my thoughts on your analysis by adding and omitting unnecessary words and phrases in your analysis
that will hopefully enhance your paper.

- IThe i nformation about the
-it can be obviously be seen
- had a downward tendencynature .

- According to the data, in the beginning of the period English-language
- tutors (70%) , ( don't forget your punctuation marks ) then it
- declined sharply inover the next
- two years to two-fifths of the percentage .
- In contrastthe contrary ( contrast - is for color ) ,

Alifah, overall, it was a good analysis, just be careful of your word choice as well as the tenses you
use in describing the time that the action was taken.
I hope it helped.


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