The table shows the percentage and the average age of travellers which is based on the kind of vehicle. Meanwhile, the various forms of transport are CO2 emissions source which is explained in the bar chart. Overall, the car is the most popular transport is used and also result many CO2 emission in the environment
People who use public transport or share car travel for the work. The most commonly used transport by car. By comparison, the cycling or walking is the least common of the vehicle which is used. The group of travellers have the highest average age which used by train or bus, and the cyclists are the lowest average age group of travellers.
CO2 emission comes from various forms of transport. The cycling or walking cause little or no pollution and the car with no passenger causes the most pollution in the environment.
Hi Yurike,
What kind of "table" that you are talking about here? I couldn't see them. Please pay more attention to upload the picture whenever it is necessary, especially when it is related to IELTS task 1. However, I hope the detailed descriptions below would help you composing a better essay later on.
1st paragraph:
- ... which is based on the kind of vehicle types .
- Meanwhile, the various forms of transport are CO2 emissions ...(confusing sentence, simplify it)kind of transports that use CO2 emissions are explained in the bar chart.
- Overall, it can be seen thatthe car is the most popular transport that is used and also resulted many CO2 emissionsin thefor the environment. (needs "period")
"Period" might look simple, but remember that punctuation is one of the criteria of assessing writing in IELTS. Also, I would also like to remind you that a task 1 essay that is below 150 words cannot go beyond 5, even worse, it can be graded as 3 or 4. Try to avoid writing below 150 words later on. :)
Aloha, here is my thought;
(1) [...] the average age of travellers which is based on the kind of vehicle modes .
(2) Meanwhile, the various forms of transport are CO2 emissions sourceemission sourcewhich is(reducing adjective clause) explained in the bar chart.
(3) [...] popular transport is(you have more verb, so be careful about subject verb agreement) used [...]
(4) People who use public transport or share car travel for the work.
The most commonly used transport by car.(use linking words to connect these sentences)
overall, I suggest that you should more practice to use more words and various vocabulary
Hello Ike, I give you my correction.
... age of travellers which are based on the ...
...e most popular transport which used and also (...) People who are using public transport or ...
In comparison, the cycling (...) vehicle which are used.
Thanks
