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the relationship between Jews and Christians, how to write about a film?



stylegirl100 1 / -  
Dec 20, 2009   #1
This essay is about a writers exploring the relationship between Jews and Christians ,and I know there are a lot of error please help me.

James Carroll's ``Constantine sword`` is a film that follows Carroll's
Voyage to understand the dark side of Christianity.
James Carroll, an former priest who left the church's
Order because the church fail to change its belief on war or to
provide any kind of supplement in the protest, against the Vietnam
War.

Though this journey, Carroll allows us to see his struggle to
comprehend his religions beliefs that he held. Carroll is force to
Confront the past, and the Christian legacy of a violence also the
beginning of it's Ideology .

James Carroll, interviews people who have a personal background
in the issue that they express. One of the first, interviews was with
Pastor Haggler about ''The Air Force Academy scandal,'' where the
evangelical Christians Cadets where forcefully pressuring
Cadets of other religions, predominantly Jews to become evangelicals.

Pastor responded, Cadets should be allow
to expression themselves in sharing ideas about religion not
just military strategy ,and these cadets are about to enter a war
with million dollar weapon they are smart enough to think freely about religon.

I can't
understand this statement, what is he saying that the
cadets are allow to mistreat others because they are about to enter a
war?

To counter this argument, is Mike a Jewish rabbi who's temple
burned down days later because of his statement explains that his son
went to the academy and was aggravate on a daily bases with
rude remarks , and the school ruling body did little to response . Mike
was force to sue the academy his augments was that he just wants the academy
to remain neural and not take on a certain ideology . Mike and Haggler both
argue on a larger scale on the issue with the separate of church and
state.

James statement that he was puzzle at why a Jewish student is single out is it
because the Christians blame the Jews for the death of Jesus? Though
out the bible the Jewish people are identify to be the killers of
Jesus . James then goes on a quest into the history of Christian how it
became violent.

The birth of Christianity ,started with Jesus but it's
relationship with war started with Constantine, when he was in a mist
of battle a vision of the cross appear to him ,and Constantine reported this to
his soldiers, ''With This Cross We Should Win.'' Constantine did win the
war and with that he converts his new empire and himself to
Christianity at that moment the cross and the sword became one.

Some will argue that Constantine used it as a military strategy.
Rome create a mass campaign to against Jews in the empire ,at
first forced Jews to convert but later blame them for misfortunes
that where happening inside the empire ,so the Jewish where cast
into a walled ghetto outside the walls of the Vatican in Rome.

The interview with the Jewish family gave insight into how Jews
lived within the walls in a business sense. Jews were not allowing to
own land or to have profession careers ,and everything they owned had
to used. The Jewish family actually made a good living selling
glass and plates soon became well know that the pope did business with
them.

The Jewish family as been making the first sets of dishes for
every new pope since 1820 after the pope granted them a passport to
travel outside of the walls. Carroll in between different interviews
gave his family history and background; consequently , the editing was crop and didn't work with the flow of the story.
Carroll started with his father history . His father came from a poor Irish
family made his way up to the FBI then caught a serial killer where
he caught the attention of the president ,who later put him in
charge of the air force as sergeant General. Carroll explain that he
wanted to be like his father . Carroll learn military gave a sense of
outsider accomplishment, but he seek a deeper inner achievement
.Carrol as torn between the seminary and the military, at eighteen
James enter the catholic church.

Carroll was seeking something different with his position as a priest
he wanted change and improvement,and to go beyond the walls of the
church he wanted to reach the people. However, seeing the catholic
responses to the Vietnam War , Carroll left the Order in 1974 and
pursue a writing career.
What I understand from the movie is that Christianity history is not
perfect, but its doesn't discredit the religious. when you have
the teaching and not the teacher, the idea can be taking out of
context. I understand the important to stand up for idea that is
unpopular and what the consequences are in supporting.
I agree with Carroll conclusion of his journey that no war is holy.
the same war with Christan against the Jewish; in a sense, compares to
the present war with Islam. A war is the result of forces that can
longer be peaceful and to be Holy is something devoted to the service of
God. Jesus stands for peace, and he never forces anyone to take on his teaching . Jesus express his beliefs to ones who wanted to listen and respect those who did not. This Quality should be present in all religion

Cindy Falls

EF_Kevin 8 / 13052  
Dec 21, 2009   #2
Use italics instead of quote marks:
James Carroll's Constantine Sword is a...

James Carroll was a former priest who left the church's Order because the church fail to change its belief on war or to provide any kind of supplement in the protest against the Vietnam War.

Use the apostrophe to show possession:
his religion's beliefs...

Jews were not allowed to own land or to have professional careers, and everything they owned had to ________ (had to what?) used.

Yes, you have mistakes, but it is easy to see that you are an intelligent, bilingual person, and your meaning is usually clear. Watch out for small mistakes, like putting 2 sentences together:

Carroll was seeking something different with his position as a priest. He wanted change and improvement and to go beyond the walls of the church. He wanted to reach the people. ----> This part is very nicely written, but I had to separate it into 3 sentences by adding periods.


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