No one is flawless
Every human has a flaw in this world. There is no existing being who is flawless. We might have met people who are good at many things or others who we might have shared similarities with but there must have been at least one person we encountered in our lives who we might have resent or hate being around with.
There might be lots of reasons but the one I will point out is the hate we feel towards other people's flaws. It may not be sensible to point this out but usually you hate a person or feel annoyed around him when you notice the person's flaw and fail to realize that you might have the same flaw. For example, many times when my cousins wold make noise my father would shout at them telling them to lower their voices. So once, my grandfather told me that my father's tells other people not to shout but shouts himself. Soon afterwards I noticed that my father would always get angry at others who made a mistake in front of him but he himself would make the same mistake.
To be honest, I may have many flaws that I fail to realize but my mother used to tell me that I talk to much. Finally when I accepted this fact I realized that I always used to avoid people who talk too much. I tried my best not to talk too much and it took me almost three years. It was hard but the good thing that came out of it was that I could stand people who talk too much.
The important thing that we should learn is that we should accept other people's flaws and try to let go of our own flaws. When we realize our own flaws and try to correct them we won't resent, hate, or be annoyed around people who have flaws.
Hi. This is an essay from SAT. I am thirteen years old and with very less experience in writing so I am sure that I might have made lots of mistakes so I request all those who read my essay to give me advices on how to improve my writing abilities.
I can see some points:
1 - This sentence "We might ...around with" in your introduction, I cannot see any thing related to a flaw or flawless. I think you should add some information. For example, even you admire someone or hate someone, all of them have flaws. Or we can easily see flaws from the person we hate
2 - spelling error: "my cousins wold" , "I talk to much"
3 - repeat some words few time "talk too much". You can change into "talkative" . Mentioning in the previous sentence, you can use some different way to express this word. "I tried my best not to make this mistake again" or "It took me almost 3 years to improve this habit"
@Smile12_12
Thank you for pointing out my mistakes as for the spelling errors I think it might while I was typing. I was in a hurry so....
Anyway thanks
Holt Educational Consultant - / 15466 Let's focus on the grammar issues for now. It appears that you have word choice errors in the essay. This was caused by commonly confused words. There is a difference between "to" (used for expressing motion or direction toward a point, person, place, or thing approached and reached, as opposed to from) and "too" (adverb, meaning also, excessively, or besides). You meant to use the latter word.
Also, you need to learn in what written situations you need to use a comma after an introductory element such as in the presentation "Finally, when I accepted...". There are also times when a comma is needed to insert a pause, to give the reader time to understand what you are saying such as, "... and try to correct them, we won't resent..."
I don't remember if I warned you before but you need to stop using contractions in your writing because you are practicing academic English writing. Always spell out the word (don't = do not, won't = will not).
Do you have access to formal English writing textbooks? There are available sources in Playstore that you can download. I suggest you download those books and read them so you can learn more about academic writing, without the use of formal tutors or teachers.
@Holt
Thank you for your advice. I'll try harder next time.
