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IELTS Task 1: The results of a survey by the UK residents


BOMAT_IRA 29 / 40  
Apr 21, 2014   #1
The tables show the reasons of a survey for people who have visited to abroad and destinations by the UK in residents.

Generally, many people go to UK with many reasons. They came from several countries from 1994 until 1998.

From the first table, purpose of visitors came to UK with different reasons. Holiday is more purpose of people to visit UK, followed by for business, visits to friends and relativities, then by other people with other reasons.

The second chart shows destination of visits by main regions which shows the majority of visitors go to Western Europe (from 19.371 in 1994 to 24.519 in 1998) and North America (from 919 to 1.823) and other regions (from 1.782 to 2.486 ) over the same period of time.

To summary, visitors go to abroad in the UK increasing sharply with different results for every year. The visitors came from several cities then increase step by step every year.




ernhy 17 / 28  
Apr 21, 2014   #2
Generally, many people go to UK with many reasons.

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Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Apr 21, 2014   #3
The second chart shows destination of visits by main regions which shows the majority of visitors go to Western Europe (from 19.371 in 1994 to 24.519 in 1998) and North America (from 919 to 1.823) and other regions (from 1.782 to 2.486 ) over the same period of time.

I think you should use past tense in this sentence because you use year
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 21, 2014   #4
The tables show the reasons of a survey for people who have visited to abroad and destinations by the UK in residents.

This sentence has several issues. First, what the tables show are not reasons of a survey. What they show are the findings of a survey carried out on reasons for foreign travel.

The tables present the findings of a survey on foreign travels by UK residents. The first table presents the findings on reasons for going abroad while the second table presents the details of holiday destinations.


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