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Resume : Janet Iwasa: How animations can help scientists test a hypothesis



zero01 1 / -  
Sep 26, 2016   #1
Scientists usually use a small objects as objects of research and must seen directly, sometimes it difficult to seen, even with the most excellent microscopes. Rapid technology change spurred researchers to modernize their research. One of technology that they use is animation which is to visualize trial or data. Animation is not only useful for communicating ideas, but also very useful to develop a hypothesis. animation is a really nice way to visualize hypotheses.

Most of Scientists still use paper and pencil to describe the processes their study, and the data is very much the need to use the computers, especially the animation design. The process of creating animation can be useful as a catalyst to help scientists realize and refine their ideas. Creating animations is very difficult and takes a lot of time and energy for scientist. Made animation to obtain satisfactory results, we have to collaborate with a team of designers and programmers. it can change the way we communicate, how we examine the data and to teach our students.

andika08 81 / 73  
Sep 26, 2016   #2
Hello
You have a good summary
I have some corrections

... a small objects as objects of research and must (...) it difficult to seen, even with the ...
Rapid technology change tospurred encourage researchers to modernize their research for improve their research.
... they use is animation which .
s]aAnimation is a really nice way to ...

... and the data is very much the need to use the computers...
... obtain satisfactory results, we people have to collaborate ...
it It can change the way we people communicate, how we people examine the ...

There are repeated words, you can change with the similar words.
You can added conjuction in between the sentences.
RAY93 35 / 166  
Sep 26, 2016   #3
Scientists usually use a small objects[singular/plural issue] as objects of research andwhich must be seen directly, sometimes it difficult to seen , even with the most excellent microscopes.

instead of saying 'small' object, you may write 'MINUSCULE'
=scientists usually use minuscule objects in research which are sometimes difficult to see by naked eyes, even with.....

Rapid technology change has spurred researchers to modernize their researchstudy [avoid repetition] . One of technologytechnologies that they use .....
... very useful to develop a hypothesis. animationit [effectively use pronouns to avoid repetition ] is a ....

Most of Scientists still use paper and pencil to ...

most of scientists still utilize paper and pencil to describe the processes of their study while those data are really need to process using computers, especially for animation design

need to concern on using a wide range of lexical resources to avoid using words repetitively.


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