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TED Review:Why some people are more altruistic than others by Abigail Marsh



Yonathan 46 / 50  
Oct 6, 2016   #1
Abigail March had an experience when someone saves her life, and she curious why someone more altruist than other people. A lot of people including everybody from philosophers and economist believe that human nature is fundamentally selfish, but some people risk their life to help people unselfishly. Abigail found something about the brain performance which affect people to more altruist rather than others.

Abigail start explaining about psychopath's brain, the research showed that psychopath has characteristics, a psychopath cannot feel someone are in distress and lack a brain part called amygdala. Is altruist people are opposite of psychopath which have big amygdala? The altruist brain is better at recognising other people's fear and has hyperactive amygdala. The altruist literally does not think of themselves as being at the centre of anything, every people have the same portion of priority in altruist mind.

korbansuspendcuy 8 / 13  
Oct 6, 2016   #2
Hi..
You have a good essay..
just a slight errors..

... when someone saves[saved] her life, and she [was] curious why someone ...

Thanks..
I hope it helps
Abrahamlincoln 54 / 50  
Oct 6, 2016   #3
Helloo Brother
Let me give you some advices

... an experience when someone saved her life

and she was curious why someone ...

but some people took a risk of their life to help people unselfishlysave other people's life

the research showed that psychopath has characteristics such as / are

Keep Writing
justivy03 - / 2265  
Oct 6, 2016   #4
Hi Yonathan, here's another one fro my end.

- ... an experience when someone saves saved her life,
- and she got curious why someone
- can be more altruist than other people.
- Abigail found something about the brains
- performance which affects people to be more altruist rather than others.

- Abigail started explaining
- about a psychopath's brain,
- the research showed that a psychopath
- IsAre altruist people arethe opposite of psychopath which havewith big amygdala?
- The altruist brain is better at recogniz ing other
- same portion of priority in an altruist mind.

There you have it Yonathan, I hope this helps in your revision and as always, should you need further assistance, we are here for you. For future writing reference,mind the association of ideas that you have in your sentences as this will affect the overall impact of the essay.


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