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Rich countries should not give jobs to skilled workers of Poor Countries-Agree or Disagree


raj_ielts 3 / 11 2  
Jan 4, 2014   #1
Rich countries should not give jobs to skilled workers eg: doctors & engineers of poor countries as they are needed by their home country than the rich country.

Do you agree or disagree?


Brain drain is one of the serious problems that underdeveloped countries are facing today. Migration of skilled workers from poor countries to rich countries is always a topic of debate. Some people argue that rich countries should not provide employment to skilled professionals from poor countries as they need to contribute to the development of their motherland. I certainly agree that rich countries should impose stern rules on employment to skilled workers from underdeveloped nations.

Here are some of the reasons why there should be such restrictions. Firstly, students from backward countries graduate utilizing the scholarships and resources of their own country. Students avail all the benefits of being citizens of their home country. However, after completing their education, students look towards developed nation for employment in order to realize their financial aspirations. For example, countries like India & China are witnessing severe talent migration to developed countries.

In addition, encouraging professional with specialized skills will do more harm than good to rich countries. In long run, skilled migrants would prefer to settle down in rich country and look forward for citizenships and therefore it is likely that developed nations may experience high unemployment rate for their own people and this might lead to communal differences and instability. For example, unemployment rate in USA has tremendously increased in 2008 resulting in economic downtrend and there have been protests on granting visas to skilled migrants from other countries.

<Conclusion> All in all, I opine, there is no doubt that cultural and technological exchange should happen between the nations but excessive talent migration to developed nations is not a good sign for both the rich and poor countries and therefore developed countries should have proper governance in place before extending employment to skilled professionals of poor countries

Pahan 1 / 1,910 553  
Jan 5, 2014   #2
Brain drain is one of the serious problems that underdeveloped countries are facing today.

... Impressive hook, this is what it should be :D

Some people argue that rich countries should not provide employment to skilled migrants from poor countries as they need to serve their motherland.

....They become "migrants" once they are given PR by rich countries ....:D
Some people argue that rich countries should not promote skill migration by providing attractive employment opportunities to the skilled professionals of poor countries. They argue that such skill migration would prevent the professionals from making their share of contribution to the development of their motherlands.

I certainly agree that rich countries should impose stern rules on employment to skilled workers from underdeveloped nations.

.... align this statement more with your prompt. Do you agree that rich countries should not give jobs to skilled workers? ... This is the question you need to answer by this line, and do it more direct.

As I always mention, you write really well and you would not have any issue with this task. :)
OP raj_ielts 3 / 11 2  
Jan 5, 2014   #3
Thanks Pahan for your valuable feedback.. This motivates me to improve myself :). Time is crucial factor that I really need to take care of.

yeah..sitting for IELTS to get PR, but disagreeing on extending employment to skilled professionals of underdeveloped countries...lol

Some people argue that rich countries should not promote skill migration by providing attractive employment opportunities to the skilled professionals of poor countries. They argue that such skill migration would prevent the professionals from making their share of contribution to the development of their motherlands.

love the way you rephrase the sentences.I'm trying to implement this but could not do it in a better way

They become "migrants" once they are given

ohh yeah...somehow I missed this logic. I would replace "migrants" with "professionals"
Pahan 1 / 1,910 553  
Jan 5, 2014   #4
I certainly agree that rich countries should impose stern rules on employment to skilled workers from underdeveloped nations.

I certainly agree that rich countries should not encourage skilled migration by providing employment opportunities to the skilled workers in poor countries. ... I tried to align it more with the prompt.

Firstly, students fromofbackwarddeveloping countries graduate utilizing the scholarships and resources of their own country.

However, after completing their education, students look towards developed nations for employment in order to realize their financial aspirations.

However, after completing education, such students would not hesitate to grab the employment opportunities in developed countries in view of enjoying a quality life.

For example, countries like India& China are witnessing severe talent migration to developed countries.

... don't use ampersands in essays. Write the word.
Also, spend a little more time on your example to elaborate on it a little bit more because that is the part you use to convince the reader about your justification. You can have the reason shorter.

You write really well and there's no need for you to worry about this task. What you've written is enough to get a very good score :)
OP raj_ielts 3 / 11 2  
Jan 6, 2014   #5
Thanks Pahan, last time I could not do well in writing :D. I've to check out the other formats of Task 2 like discussion format essays etc. Your (Dumi & You) comments and feedback really matters and I could see some improvement in my approach :). Thanks for that !!


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