The sales of travel, clothes, film/music and books in 2003 and 2013.

The pie charts compares the percentage of online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand. The data covers the sales of travel, clothes, film/music and books in 2003 and 2013. Overall, it can be seen that while film/music and books sold more via online, the sales of travel and clothes was smaller in the end of the period.

The biggest increase in online shopping was experienced by movie and music items. Its figure stood at 21% in 2003 and 10 years later, the proportion was 12% biggerwhich made it dominated online sales in 2013. The number of books sold online also witnessed an increase.In 2003, books sales contributed 19% to online shopping which was the smallest number of that year. However, the figure rose to 22% in 2013 so that it no longer in lowest position.

The other two subjects saw drops in online sales proportion. Online purchasing of travel which once became a dominant sale in 2003 (36%) had lost its popularity in 2013, indicated by a dramatic fall of 6%. The proportion of clothes sold online also smallerin the end of the period. In 2003, 24% of online sales was experienced by clothes sales, but ten years later it sales was the smallest, which was only 16% of all sales.

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Hi Angga, I like the way that you developed this report summary. You were very informative and clear. Yet, I reckon that your lexical resource is little bit different from your previous essay. I have no idea what is wrong with this essay, but I notice that the use of advance vocabularies were not as many as your past essay. Therefore, if you have a target to reach band 6 or above, try to use more complex vocabularies in both Tasks (1 and 2). That said, there are still some grammar issues with your work that need to be addressed.


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However, the figure raised to 22% in 2013...


that it was no longer in the lowest position. (missing verb)


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So, good work on your well-developed report. I hope to see more improvement with your upcoming essays.

Good luck! :)