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how can school help new students get accustomed to new environment?

thinhtvdhtm 41 / 97  
Sep 20, 2009   #1
i am preparing for ielts, i am really worried about my writing skill, could u help me check my vocabulary, sentence structures, logic? thank you very much?

When students move to a new school, they sometimes face problems. How can schools help these students with their problems?

Students who move to a new school often confront with many problems; it is very important for them to get accustomed as soon as possible. Some students find it really easy; however, others' adaptation is not as good as their friends'. Consequently, schools should help them come through this experience successfully.

To begin with, in the first weeks, schools should give some orientation course which help freshman get involved with new environment. Advisors or administrators should take them on a tour of school and show them around should. Advisors should tell them about the school' history, how to access facilities in the school such as gyms, library, access computer, carteen, the rule they have to follow, and so on.

Besides, schools should help them find accommodation. Most new students wonder that whether they should live in hostel or rent a flat outside the school campus; therefore, School advisors can show the both advantages and disadvantages of these kinds of accommodation. School should arrange place in campus area for students who want to live in school, and help others who prefer living outside school to find place for living.

Last but not least, schools should constitute clubs, outside activities to make a good environment for students participate. When these students attend, they have more chance to make friend with others.

To sum up, the role of school is very important to help new students get accustomed to new environment
essay0405 7 / 16  
Sep 20, 2009   #2
To say again, you should avoid using the phrase 'last but not least' ( I read this in a book that help improve your essay writing) and check your grammar again.
OP thinhtvdhtm 41 / 97  
Sep 20, 2009   #3
thank thu ! are u vietnamese? nice to meet you? could u give me more detail pl?
essay0405 7 / 16  
Sep 26, 2009   #4
I think if you are Vietnamese you should buy this book 'Essay Writing for English tests' written by Gabi Duigu and publish by Nhan Tri Viet company. I think this book is very useful, I've learn from it very much about how to write an essay, style, etc.
mrchildchild 1 / 1  
Sep 26, 2009   #5
I've got a IELTS band 8, and it's pretty easy if ur wirting is structured and clearly pharsed
OP thinhtvdhtm 41 / 97  
Sep 26, 2009   #6
thanks mrchildchil!
ielts 8 band, it means that your english is excellent. in your opinion, with this essay, how many scores i can achieve? thank so much! i am preparing for ielts but i find that writing essay is really difficult for me! how can i upgrade this skill? thanks again

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