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What are seasons? Are they as different as they seem? - essay



NVShouaXyooj 1 / -  
Oct 15, 2012   #1
What Spring Once Must Fall Once

What are seasons? Are they as different as they seem? When the average person thinks about spring and fall, there are many things that their mind associates with each season. A person might think of spring as a new beginning and fall the death of leaves. Despite the many norms of both seasons, they both have many aspects which intertwine. In this text, we are going to focus mainly about the seasons in North Carolina. Every state and geographic area's seasons may differ because of location and scientific reasons.

When we think of spring what are some of the first things that pop up on our minds? Here are some of the things my siblings said, "Babies", "flowers", "bees", and "rain." There are many things that spring has to offer that fall doesn't offer. When we think of spring we think of happiness. We also associate spring with semesters in college terms, such as spring semester or second semester. Nature is what we see the most of, the bears are awakening from their hibernating, lilies and daisies are blooming, the bees are buzzing, and the days are longer. In daylight saving time for spring, we move our clock one hour ahead because the sun is up later and longer. But besides environmental differences, what we wear also changes. After a long three months of winter we could finally bring out the skirts, spring dresses, tanks, shorts, and sandals. Holidays and school breaks are also different, in spring we look forward the St. Patrick's Day, Easter, and for many students spring break.

On the other hand, when we think of fall we usually associate it with the year ending and dead colors. I asked my siblings what they think of when I say the season fall, they replied with "brown", "orange", "Halloween", and "leaves." As you can tell, just like spring, fall has colors which we normally associate it with. Spring is bright with pastel colors which signify happiness; as for fall, the colors are usually dull and dark, such as black and brown. This is why the colors we normally associate with Halloween and Thanksgiving, which are holidays during the fall season, came about. If you were to ever Google fall, some pictures that may come up are of trees and the different color of leaves on it; unlike spring when the leaves are growing and green, the leaves in fall are dying and brown. Fall may resemble the beginning of school and football season. Besides all of these physical changes in nature, our clothing also changes like spring. From shorts and tanks during the summer to sweaters, scarves, light coats, and boots during fall.

Climate and weather often differ between spring and fall but there are many similarities. We often think of fall and think of flu and hurricane season. People often get sick during the transition of hot and warm weather to a chillier weather. And during late summer and fall is when hurricane season is at its peak, for instance hurricane Katrina which took its blow on New Orleans during August 20-29 which was the end of summer and beginning of fall. The temperature during both fall and spring do not differ much in that both of them lay between the 60's and 70's. Precipitation during these season differ in that for spring, rain is either above average for one month and the next month it would be below average. As for fall, rain is more constant and leveled during the three months of fall. This could be show in a graph received from Lincolnton, North Carolina.

Both these seasons differ in location. For instance, as of right now Minnesota is already receiving snow while we are still seeing leaves falling. Minnesota and many northern states receive shorter spring and fall seasons, and longer summer and winter seasons in terms of temperature wise. They receive more extreme winter and summers compared to North Carolina. This is because of scientific reasoning referring to the equator and its distance from it as well as other factors. Elevation affects the temperature during the seasons, as you move higher up, the temperature drops significantly. Such cold places are Mt. Everest and the Appalachian mountains. This is true for both the seasons spring and fall, and what they typically share in common. Seasons often reflect on where people would prefer living. Many people would move down south to Florida or even North Carolina, because the weather is much warmer throughout the year compared to other states.

Despite the many differences in clothing, precipitation, and color these two seasons may have, there are many things they share in common. In school, both seasons are used to determine semesters, either spring semester of fall semester. Spring meaning the end of school and last semester. And fall meaning the beginning of school and first semester of the annual school year. They both share a part in the daylight savings time; during spring the clock is moved back one hour and when fall comes later that year, the clock moves back one hour to balance it out. This allows people to save money on electricity and have a longer day in terms of sun light. In the chart above you can see that during the months of spring, which is March, April, and May, and the months of fall, which is September, October, and November, the weather is very similar. Summer is the peak of hot weather, and winter being the lowest point in terms of cold weather, fall and spring fall right between them both. During both these seasons, the sun's angle is identical in that both are 23.5°.

Overall, you can see that both spring and fall don't differ much at all. People typically find them different in physical changes, but the weather and climate are fairly similar. Seasons are what we make of them; they are distinct differences in the solar equinox and the angle of the sun that makes the weather, climate, and the leaves different for each season. As George Santayana once said "To be interested in the changing seasons is a happier state of mind than to be hopelessly in love with spring."

Sheri_Editor - / 14  
Nov 7, 2012   #2
Hello! First, I recommend changing your title; unless, of course, the title was assigned. Given the ambiguity of the title, however, I am assuming it is not assigned.

The overall premise of the essay is commendable. I like where you're going with the context. However, there are areas that can be tightened to ensure the message you are trying to convey is clear and that the wording flows easily and interestingly from one sentence and paragraph to the other.

Considering the fact that each writer has a unique voice, I refrain from recommending too many changes in terms of using "fancy" words. Still, there is room to improve on wording choices where the message will be more illustrative and interesting. Below you can see how I edited the first few sentences of the third paragraph of your essay.

Alternately, when one thinks about Fall, it is generally associated with the end of the year and earthen colors. When I asked my siblings what comes to mind when thinking about Fall, their answers included words like brown, orange, Halloween, and leaves. Similar to the responses associated with Spring, Fall has colors that are associated with the season. Where Spring is bright and tends to generate images of pastel colors signifying happiness and rebirth, Fall generates images of earth-tones where -in some instances- the end of the year is synonymous with the end of a cycle (e.g. dying leaves).

Also, you can see how I capitalized Fall and Spring. This might not be appropriate for your essay, but if you are going to personify the seasons you will want to apply this change. To be sure, check with your tutor or instructor.


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