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IT sector business and childrens impact



itaseptiyani 1 / 2  
May 11, 2017   #1

IT era and kids



Technology has become an integral part of human life. Gadget can improve skill of children in the IT sector and support when they learn in the school because accessed easily. It agreed that if parent give the gadget to the children in early aged, this occurs because of specific reason.

Children can use IT access every information with internet connection. There are many applications, the greatest example such as microsoft power point, excel, word, and others which can support their study when they have homework from the teacher. While more active and efficient. The other example are auto cad, corel draw, photoshop, and other application which can help in the art sector. In these days there are many competitions related to design using the application, children who using computer or laptop in early aged, it are more smart and professional in the IT.

There are many informations can use to support when they study in the school. A good example is e-book, in the modern era it is more popular and overwhelming majority of children are more likely to use it, because it is accessed everytime and everywhere. The contents usually is more complete and the cost is more likely cheapest. The subjects such as physics, mathematics, biology, chemistry, and others can download in the computer or tablet.

The aforementioned evidences related to this that using the electronic stuff such as computer, laptop, and tablet in the early aged can improve talent of children in IT sector. It is because more effective and efficient.

moh_jawahir - / 7  
May 11, 2017   #2
Hi... Ita Septiyani

the school because accessed easily please see the pattern of sentence

Children can use IT to access every ...

While more active and efficient.(see panctuation) The other examples are auto cad, ...

children who using computer or (...), it are more smart ...

There are many informations = this is uncountable noun can use to support ...

The contents usually is are more

The subjects such as physics, (...) can download (it will be better to use passive voice to suit with your meaning) in the computer or tablet.

It is because of more effective and efficient.

hope this helps,
keep cheers,

Moh. Jawahir
trilestari 1 / 3  
May 11, 2017   #3
Halo, Miss Ita!

... or laptop in early aged, it are more smart and professional in the IT.

Please pay attention in bold words, you would like to remember that smart has 1 syllabel and professional has 3 syllable.

I think enough from me, because Mr. Jawahir had been giving you more correction in your essay.

Keep your best spirit, get IELTS band score 7.0!
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Best regards,

Tri Lestari P.


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