Unanswered [1] | Urgent [0]
  

Home / Writing Feedback   % width   Posts: 4


IELTS: Sector of the economy - different age groups were employed.



Eva Novita Sari 47 / 67  
Apr 22, 2014   #1
The table below shows the in which sector of the economy different age groups were employed.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant
_________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________
Answer:

The table shows information which is sector of the economy different age group of employment sector.

Generally, the data explains several categories employment.

Firstly, it is showed employment in several sectors such as accountancy, law, catering, agriculture, and education respectively undergo decrease steadily approximately less than 4-12 employment in groups with from 18-25 age, 25-40 age, and 40-65 age. Then, employment in sector accountancy is lower than others approximately 2-3 employment.

Secondly, however, the data estimated employment in several sectors undergo increase steadily such as local government, health, manufacturing, and other with age of employment among 18-65 age whom work in there. By contrast, employments work in the retail which has many persons approximately 23 people with 18-25 age. However, worker is from 25-26 age decrease sharply.

To sum up, the data is providing statistical information which is increasing employment in several sectors of depending from age them and sector what they want to join.


  • tuesday_001.png


SHanafi 120 / 357  
Apr 22, 2014   #2
The table shows information which is sector of the economy different age group of employment sector.

... The table illustrates the different number of age group who work in various economy sectors.
fikri 5 / 310  
Apr 23, 2014   #3
pay more attention with your tenses use, when you can use present, past, passive or perfect, I suggest you to read more your grammar book, so that you can understand when you can apply each of them on your report or essay
dumi 1 / 6793  
Apr 23, 2014   #4
The table shows information which is sector of the economy different age group of employment sector.

This is not at all clear :( You need to introduce the graph to the reader in a more comprehensible manner;
The table presents the distribution of employment as per different economic sectors by three different age groups.

Generally, the data explains several categories employment.

.... I noticed that you have a problem with writing the overview in other threads too. You need to pay more attention to what you should present in the overview;

state the main trend/ trends in the graph. Don't give detail such as data here


Home / Writing Feedback / IELTS: Sector of the economy - different age groups were employed.
Do You Need
Academic Writing
or Editing Help?
Fill out one of these forms:

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Best Essay Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳

Academic AI Writer:
Custom AI Writer ◳