IELTS: There have been significant developments in the field of IT!

IELTS Writing Task 2:
In the last 20 years there have been significant developments in the field of information technology (IT), for example, the World Wide Web and communication by email. However, future developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive.

To what extent do you agree with this view?
AT LEAST 250 WORDS.

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Decade after decade, every day, scientists discover magnificent devices in the field of IT, such as interactive boards, multicore computers and laptops, tablets, which have an incredible resolution and also mobile phones, which have the power of a computer. World Wide Web and communication via email are some of the positive sides of information technology, however, there are some negative aspects.

Firstly, connecting people by email is easy and fast. In addition, World Wide Web offers humanity to access to information, which they want to know for less than 10 seconds. These are two of the benefits, why IT is useful.

Besides, nowadays technology is entering into our society really quick and scientists develop robots, which help people cope with their problems or just invent coffee machines, engines with integrated computers and etc. For example, before centeries, there were not washing machines, which clean your clothes, while a person do another job.

Secondly, there are some drawbacks about this issue. Scientists believe that one day people will face their developments, for instance robots, and they will not succeed to control them. All this inventions will try to take control of the Earth.

In conclusion, I agree that IT discoveries are likely to have more disadvantages than benefits and people should know how to use their developments properly.

Decade after decade, every day, scientists discover magnificent devices in the field of IT, such as interactive boards, multicore computers and laptops, tablets, which have an incredible resolution and also mobile phones, which have the power of a computer. World Wide Web and communication via email are some of the positive sides of information technology, however, there are some negative aspects.

It seems there is missing information between your first and second sentence. You must pay attention on its cohesion and coherence.

Firstly, connecting people by email is easy and fast. In addition, World Wide Web offers humanity to access to information, which they want to know for less than 10 seconds. These are two of the benefits, why IT is useful.

1. your first and second information in this paragraph are just the same. Their main point is that email connects people easily and fast. Then, it is contrast with the last sentence.

2. You should give some additional information/explanation like examples then give reason.
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Besides, nowadays technology is entering into our society really quick and scientists develop robots, which help people cope with their problems or just invent coffee machines, engines with integrated computers and etc. For example, before centeries, there were not washing machines, which clean your clothes, while a person do another job.

1. "Entering into", you should move the word 'into'
2. You put too many ideas here. I suggest you to focus only in one idea, then explain and describe it deeply
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Secondly, there are some drawbacks about this issue. Scientists believe that one day people will face their developments, for instance robots, and they will not succeed to control them. All this inventions will try to take control of the Earth.

Here, you wrote a contrary idea with the previous paragraph. So, I think the usage of "secondly" is not appropriated.
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In conclusion, I agree that IT discoveries are likely to have more disadvantages than benefits and people should know how to use their developments properly.

How could you conclude that its disadvantages are more than its advantages as you wrote only one of its weakness, then there are two paragraphs of its strengths.

This is good. Let me give a few edits
Loosening people's hold on the latest inventions is one drawback to technology. One example is robots. Scientists predict that one day people must save from intelligent robots taking no limited judgement in the world.

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Working with an essay's layout, you' better pay particular attention to this point:
Developing the classical five paragraph essay or more will send you to earn a very impressive result, but this should be followed by a succinct explanation, coherent sentences, grammar error-free, colloquial usage, etc. Otherwise, you may get an average score.