Silkworms experience their life in five stages and spend about 10 weeks from eggs to become moths

Life cycle of the silkworm is illustrated by the diagram and picture. At first glance, it is evident that, silkworms experience their life in five stages and spend approximately 10 weeks from eggs to become moths.

First step, the eggs are spawned and adhered by their mother on leaves. After 10 days, the eggs hatch and transform to be silkworm larva. To survive their life, larvas eat mulberry leaf, their favorite diet. During four to six weeks, enough long time, they are going to grow up and produce silk thread. Eventually in that phase, larvas insert its self to coil of silk to make cocoon in three to eight days. While larva is inside, it does not look for and consume food or drink. Afterwards, silkworm comes out from cocoon with new appearance in 16 days. In the end of stages, it becomes a moth with wings and has a skill to fly. The figure of moth is totally different with silkworm, people call it metamorphose.

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L THE life cycle of the silkworm is illustrated by the ATTACHED diagram and picture. At first glance, it is evident that, silkworms experience their life in five stages. DURING THESE STAGES, IT WILL TAKE and spend approximately 10 weeks from FOR THE eggs to become moths.

First step AT THE BEGINNING, the eggs are spawned and adhered by their mother on TO THE leaves. After 10 days, the eggs hatch and transform to be DEVELOP INTO silkworm larva. To survive their life , larvas LARVAE (PLURAL FORM) eat mulberry leaf LEAVES 9PLURAL FORM), their favorite diet.

During THE NEXT four to six weeks, enough long time, they THESE LARVAE WILL are going to grow up and produce silk threadS. Eventually in IN that phase, larvas LARVAE insert its self ITSELF INto THE coil of silk to make cocoon , CREATING A COCOON in three to eight days. While larva is inside, it does not look for and consume food or drink.

Afterwards, THE silkworm comes BREAKS OUT out from THE cocoon with A new appearance in 16 days. In the end of stages AT THE END OF THE STAGES, it becomes a moth with wings and has a skill to CAN fly. The figure of moth is totally different with FROM THE silkworm, people call it metamorphose A METAMORPHOSIS.

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A life cycle of a silkworm is broken down into four stages. Having started in eggs, such life cycle ends with cocoon and continues to grow into an adult moth over the following days. This diagram demonstrates the most advanced form of metamorphosis .