My sister got sick - I had embarrassing experience then.

Elhaam 1 / -

Jan 24, 2014 #1

The most embarrassing experience that I had been through is when my sister got sick.My mom tried many ways and home medicine but nothing was good for my sister's flu.Afterwards she decided to go to a drugstore and buy somethig like a vitamin or aspirin.She asked me to go with her but it was Sunday afternoon and when I am at home I use to wear pajama and watch tv like a couch potato.I refused because I would have to change my clothes,but she conviced me that we will go by car and it is not necessary to enter the store.When we arrived there my mom entered the store,then i realized that she forgot her wallet in the car.I thought " How she will pay without her wallet?"

I decided to go there and give her the wallet, but that wasn't the problem.The moment I arrived there I heard people laughing and saying: Look Look how beautiful is that giraffes.Guess what?! The giraffes was on my pajamas,I was at the drugstore wearing pajamas.

Thanks in advance

Neupane3 1 / 3

Jan 24, 2014 #2

Hello Elhaam, I found some punctuation errors in your paragraph.
Always space after (,)and (.)
You don't have to use (") to say your point of view. If you are citing author and you are referring other people's word, at that time you have to use (").

Make some correction in capitalization of word because.
Never use 2 mark at one time like you use ?! together . This is the mistake. I think, in you sentence only ! not ?
And read the paragraph again you are also going to find your the mistake
But, don't worry. I'm also suffering from English language. :(. Hope we are going to learn.
Good Luck!