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Smog: causes and solutions



Thmn 2 / 4  
Oct 23, 2010   #1
Hi everyone I am new in this site and I want you to help me improve my English writing.

Smog is a type of air pollution which can cover the air of an area causing a lot of problem and stress for people. What are the important causes and solutions for smog?

Smog is caused by many factors. First cause is the gas released by engine to regroup in the air constituting big pollution, this includes smock released by vehicles, factories and others diesel users. Second cause is open burning of. It is a natural cause which menaces many counties in the world. The fire forest might be caused by a natural cause such as an increase of temperature and it always a lot of smocks. The last cause is the waste such as rubbish and used oil which we throw in some places where they are exposed to the sunlight and after some times it transfers to dangerous gases invading our nature by causing a lot of smog. These the most important causes of smog.

The solutions of preventing smog are important and have to be done by everyone to protect our nature. The first solution is to transfer factories outside of the city to avoid the regropement of smock in the atmosphere of the city. The second solution is to try to decrease the using of diesel vehicle as more as we can by using solar energy or other source of energy which are friendlier to the nature. The last solution is to try some solution for our waste such as burry them in the sand. There are more solutions that we can propose but these are the most important ones.

As a big problem menacing our nature, we have to work together against smog to protect our environment by avoiding the causes and applying the solutions.

Kimishme 2 / 5  
Oct 23, 2010   #2
Smog is a type of air pollution which can cover the air of an area, causing a lot of problems and stress for people. What are the important causes and solutions for smog? (Is this the prompt?)

Smog is caused by many factors.

First cause is the gas, released by engine,to regroupregrouping in the air constituting big pollution, thiswhich includes smockg released by vehicles, factories and others diesel users.

I'm sorry to say, but I think your paper is kind of confusing overall.
You might want to read over it yourself and kind of fix things to make it make more sense.
Also, you saying 'smock', and I'm guessing you meant 'smog'.
Anyway, good luck on your paper! :]
OP Thmn 2 / 4  
Oct 25, 2010   #3
kimishme, thank you very much for your interesting comment. It helps me a lot.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Oct 27, 2010   #4
Simplify:
Smog is a type of air pollution which can cover the air of an area, causing a lot of problems and stress for people. What are the important causes and solutions for smog?

---Oh!! Ha ha, I was correcting the wrong thing.

Smog is caused by many factors. ---- this is a boring sentence to begin the essay with! Can you make it more meaningful?

The fir st cause is the gas

The second ca use is ...

open burning of (What is this? Is a word missing?)

I'll add a comma here:
There are more solutions that we can propose, but these are the most important ones.

This essay has great "structure!"
OP Thmn 2 / 4  
Oct 29, 2010   #5
EF KEVIN thank you very much for your comments.
as you said there was a word missing there when i said(open burning of )
I was going to say :open burning of forest
thank you very much


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