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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
what other measures do you think might be effective
Petrol is the main component in running vehicle. Therefore, many people think that if the price of petrol rises, inhabitant will think twice to use their vehicle or stop to buy it. So, the pollution will be reduced.
Moreover, if the petrol is getting more expensive, people will try to looking for another alternative transportation that is cheaper-public transportation. Public transportation helps city to reduce the number of cars and motorcycles. This causes reducing of transportation volume, then this reduces traffic jam.
However, This does not proved in many developing countries, for example Indonesia. In the last ten years of Yudhoyono's era, the price of petrol has increased three times. The increasing of price is up to 50%. But this does not give big influence of selling petrol. Furthermore, the number of vehicles is rising. This causes of many reasons such as the price of cars and motorcycles that is cheaper, the ease in credit of cars and motorcycles and the last factor is the bad facilities in public transportation. Moreover, if the petrol's price solution is only works poor people not the rich people.
So, based on reasons above, there are many other factors that have to be considered beside the petrol's price. According to Transportation Department's research, the best solution to overcome traffic jam is providing good public transportation. The research's result said that people choose their own car, because they are not satisfied with facilities in public transportation-safety, comfort, speed. if three main factors in public transportation is fixed, people are more attracted to leave their own vehicle that is often trapped by traffic jam, and choose public transportation.
Hence, I do not agree if the high price for petrol is the best solution. The most effective solution for transportation problem is proper mass transportation for all people, that is proved success in many countries-Malaysia, Australia, etc.
best regards,
aji
Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
what other measures do you think might be effective
Petrol is the main component in running vehicle. Therefore, many people think that if the price of petrol rises, inhabitant will think twice to use their vehicle or stop to buy it. So, the pollution will be reduced.
Moreover, if the petrol is getting more expensive, people will try to looking for another alternative transportation that is cheaper-public transportation. Public transportation helps city to reduce the number of cars and motorcycles. This causes reducing of transportation volume, then this reduces traffic jam.
However, This does not proved in many developing countries, for example Indonesia. In the last ten years of Yudhoyono's era, the price of petrol has increased three times. The increasing of price is up to 50%. But this does not give big influence of selling petrol. Furthermore, the number of vehicles is rising. This causes of many reasons such as the price of cars and motorcycles that is cheaper, the ease in credit of cars and motorcycles and the last factor is the bad facilities in public transportation. Moreover, if the petrol's price solution is only works poor people not the rich people.
So, based on reasons above, there are many other factors that have to be considered beside the petrol's price. According to Transportation Department's research, the best solution to overcome traffic jam is providing good public transportation. The research's result said that people choose their own car, because they are not satisfied with facilities in public transportation-safety, comfort, speed. if three main factors in public transportation is fixed, people are more attracted to leave their own vehicle that is often trapped by traffic jam, and choose public transportation.
Hence, I do not agree if the high price for petrol is the best solution. The most effective solution for transportation problem is proper mass transportation for all people, that is proved success in many countries-Malaysia, Australia, etc.
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