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The state's expenditure on art


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May 21, 2021   #1

art versus basic needs



People have diverse options about the state's expenditure on art. Some people argued that instead of squandering money on art organizations, governments should allocate taxpayers' money for the improvement of other basic necessities. While this thinking is valid to a certain extent, I believe that state funding of art is worth every penny.

There are some justifications given by people who oppose diverting funds towards arts. First of all, art is not considered to be essential, compared to other critical aspects of the sustainability of human's life. For example, state budgets should be spent on public services such as education, healthcare and infrastructure, which are vital for a country to function properly. In addition to this, it is argued that some art projects are self-sufficient in finance, for they can earn money from ticket sales and private investors. As a result, it is superfluous for government to allocate budget for the arts.

Despite the aforementioned drawbacks, I would content that art should be given the top priority. On the individual level, art has been regarded as the valuable supplement for humans' soul. For instance, art products enhance our spiritual lives by reducing psychological stress and bringing us great faith in promising future. On the social level, investment in arts is such a strategic way to boost the economy. Traditional arts, take local handicraft as an example, make a profound impression on international tourists, which facilitates the development of tourism industry. Therefore, it is indisputable that arts generate revenue in return.

In conclusion, it is clear to me that art expenditure is advantageous for both individuals and society, so funding arts by the government is not a wastage of money.
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May 21, 2021   #2
While this thinking is valid to a certain extent, I believe that state funding of art is worth every penny.

You are not supplying a proper extent response. There needs to bea measured reference to your opinion. There needs to be a clear representation such as:

I partially support state funding for the acts to the extent that relates to... or I fully support ... based on...

The opinion statement needs to offer the measured response as a balance to your supporting reasons.

The discussion paragraphs use a comparative discussion where it is not required. This is not a comparison essay. It is a single s discussion. Avoid making this mistake in the future to avoid severe penalties in your final score. You do not need to justify the opposing view, just convincingly support your opinion using valid reasons based on common knowledge or personal observations.


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