The statistic characterizing of human population trends in Scotland from 1940 to 2020

Demographic Trends in Scotland - Task 1

The statistic characterizing of human population trends in Scotland from 1940 to 2020 which was categorized on birth rate, population growth rate and death rate is illustrated in the line graph and measured in percentage. It is clear that the tendency show a declining population in Scotland over a 80-year period.

The birth proportion experienced a dramatic decrease from 2.5 per cent in 1940 to 0.5 in 2020. There were a slight rise in the late 1940s and 1960s accompanied with considerable falls, especially between 1950 and 1960.

The number of population growth was a similar trend during the period question and indicating a strong link between birth and population rate. There is a significant increase between 1945 and 1955.

While the death rate decrease sharply from 1940 to 1955 of 0,4% and then went down steadily over a 45-year period latter, there is envisaged to rise slightly over the next decade which predicted as the old generation growth.

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If you write THE NUMBER then this should be followed by COUNTABLE NOUNS, e.g. THE NUMBER OF PEOPLE/ THE NUMBER OF CARS.


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