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The status of Japanese citizens in total - population statistic



Trias 23 / 27  
May 26, 2015   #1
The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan.

The bar graph and the table give information about the status of Japanese citizens in total and those who are over 65 years old respectively during the period 1950 to 2010, the current year and the prediction for 2035 until 2055. It is noticeable that the number of people over in Japan as well as those who are above the age of 65 will reach its highest in 2035, while 2055 will see people this group of age dominating the population proportion.

Moving to a more detailed analysis, Japan will have 37.2 millions of people over 65 years old in the country in 2035, when it will be the highest over the timeframe. There will be a slight decrease in the number of these people in 2055 at 36.5 millions.

On the other hand, the number of total population in Japan gradually rose from 1950 until it peaked at 127.8 millions in 2005. Afterwards, the fall in 2010 and 2015 will be followed by a dramatic fall during the next couple of decades. The proportion of people beyond their 65s will continue to grow until 2055 at above two-fifths of Japan's total population.


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lcturn87 - / 423  
May 26, 2015   #2
Please look at the chart and table again. This will help you as you write your comparison and ensure you have accurate details.

I would just explain how both the chart and table show the total number of Japanese citizens who are over 65 years old. Then you could form another sentence stating that the chart calculates the population every 5 years from 1950 to 2015. I think this chart shows that the population will decrease, but the number of those over 65 will increase in 2035. The next portion of this sentence seems too confusing. You could change it to:

"In 2055, the number of individuals who are 65 years and older will increase the most". You could also end this sentence by stating..."will increase in the Japanese population."

These are suggestions to help you improve because the reader needs to know who the people are in this age group.

If you want to begin the next paragraph you should state, "A more detailed analysis shows that..."

Your last paragraph, you begin to discuss the overall population in Japan and then discuss those who are over 65 years old.


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