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Essay about : What does StockBroker do?



scoban 1 / 2  
Aug 16, 2016   #1
A stockbroker is a person who buys or sells shares in a stock market. In this article, I would like to give some useful facts about the daily life of the stockbroker.

Before diving into the details about the stockbroker's daily life, I give you a necessary information how the broker features are. As you might know, the stock market is all about numbers and analytical thinking. You must be far from it unless you are good at numbers. It is also required that the one must have ability to think strategically.

It is clear that being a stockbroker is a challenging process. Because, There are lots of parameters which make you decide whether you buy or sell shares. Some of parameters are company's future plans, its annual incomes, its future investments, market's offer and demand, price of raw materials and so on. All arguments must be dissect carefully, and inference and conclude where it is the right time to trade or not. For instance, The price of raw materials play a prominent role when deciding to sell or buy shares. Let's think about a building sector. If there is a decrease in prices of cements, the expenditure of constructing a house is going to fall down significantly, consequently, there will be a rapid buying power growth in building sectors. People who dream to own a house is likely to demand mortgages from banks. Therefore, shares of both companies and banks are going to rise up quickly. As a result, as long as you buy shares in low price and sell them high, you may double or triple your money. Of course, it is possible, vice versa.

It is obvious that the wast majority of stockbrokers play fairly. However, plenty of them manipulate the stock market. There are different ways of manipulations that they may do. In the stock market, shares are priced naturally. It means that the prices are determined by offer and demand. A bad broker can illegally make shares grow up, as a result of it, innocent people will buy it. Once prices are increased, our bad guy sells all of them, earns a very huge amount of money.

The most of countries' stock markets are regulated by the law. No manipulations are allowed. There are really though punishments who does not obey the law such fines, forbid to make a trade or jail. In my opinion, no bail is allowed. Because, It is a really ugly situation that a government loose its prestige and trust.

It can be concluded that being a broker is a long-term learning process. If you do not have required skill and patient, it can be clearly seen that it does not fit for you. Probably, the best option is to discover another way of investments.

Beauty17 56 / 79  
Aug 16, 2016   #2
Hallo mr @scoban, it is nice to read your essay about what does stock broker do? i get a new knowledge from this essay clearly. you have explained it completely. Overall your english is very good. i try to give some comments for you.. i do my best to correct your essay. i hope that it will be useful for you..

i do nott know why you abridge the sentence of let us become let's in your essay. i think in academic writing is better if you write let us than you abridge it. and next for this sentence : The most of countries' stock markets are regulated by the law. i do not know what you mean with ' symbol. but overall i like your essay.. thank you
justivy03 - / 2265  
Aug 16, 2016   #3
Hi Coban, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, I hope you find this website to be worthy of your reference as well as your source of valuable information for your writing projects. We strive to provide you with the most accurate feedback that will be helpful to your revision.

Now, the essay can still be enhanced, first by merging some of the paragraphs and maintain or keep the essay to a maximum of 3 paragraphs, this way, it will not only look formal, it will also make it easier for the reader to understand the transition of the ideas that you are trying to present in your project.

Furthermore, on the 2nd paragraph, I suggest the revision below;
- Before divingAs we dive into the details
- about theof a stockbroker's daily life,

Below is for the last two paragraphs;

- TheIn most of countries'( you don't have to put a punctuation mark on the word "countries") stock markets are regulated by the law.

- No manipulationsManipulation isare allowed.
- There are really though punishmentsDue punishment is tough, for those who does not
- obey the law such as fines,
- forbidden to make a trade or jail time .
- In my opinion, no bail is allowed. Because, because , It is a
- reallyan ugly situation that a
- government loose its prestigeintegrity and trust.

- beingto become a broker is a long-term learning process.
- If you do not have the required skills and patientpatience ,
- it can be clearly seen that it does not fit for you.
- ... is to discover another way of investmentsinvesting .

There you go Coban, I hope the above corrections and remarks are helpful to your revision.
OP scoban 1 / 2  
Aug 16, 2016   #4
I am glad to be hepful. Thanks for your feedback. @Beauty17.

@justify03

Thanks for valuable feedbacks. I am really happy to see my mistakes. I have been accepted as a graduate student. I do not have English qualification, therefore the university will allocate an exam in few weeks later. I have to write at least 450 words. It is likely to write more than 3 paragraphs.

I believe that I am going to success in the exam with your valuable feedbacks.

Bests,
justivy03 - / 2265  
Aug 16, 2016   #5
Hi Coban, thank you for appreciating our work here on EF, we definitely feel more energized whenever we read your feedbacks and you don't have to worry about not having English qualifications, though it's necessary for you to get one if you want to concentrate in this field, it is not a must when you just want to enhance your skills in writing.

Now, don't get me wrong, English is not an easy language, it has a lot of rules, just like when you're writing an essay with word restrictions such as this one above, however, everything can be learnt and practice will be your best friend. Reading also helps a lot in your exposure to different words that you can use in your essay. The more words you know, the more elaborate your essay will be.

Moreover, you need to make sure that the essay you're writing is true to it's purpose, that it's streamlined and not going to a different direction or jumbled ideas altogether. Having said that, write as often as you can and make sure to practice proof reading when you can.

I hope to review your revised essay and future writing projects.


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