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Students should be allowed to pursue college for free



honganh2299 1 / -  
Jun 16, 2023   #1
Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education and that the government should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have.

To what extent do you agree or disagree ?



It is widely believed that all people who are entitled to university education should have provision of free- of-charge education for all, whether rich or poor. From my perspective, I totally disagree with this statement.

On the one hand, there are various compelling reasons why students should be allowed to pursue college for free. It could be explained that it would help reduce the huge tuition from their children learning. As a result, their costs of living were less heavy. Besides, the poor and difficult children would have a chance to go to school more and that would create a more educated workforce.

On the other hand, if the free-college policy was carried out, the national economy would have to suffer varying pressure. the educational quality could be low. That is because the teacher would lose the effort to teach with the little salary, which is not enough to pay for their living. Furthermore, the material facilities for equipping every school wastes a lot that causes budget deficits and the nation would go down day- by-day in an economic recession.

To conclude, although tuition waivers seem to be a good idea for people , I believe that the government should not effectuate abolishing tuition fees.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15347  
Jun 18, 2023   #2
It is widely believed

This is an incorrect restatement. There is a world of difference between "some people" and "it is widely believed". The difference being that the former indicates a measure of a group of people, while the latter, refers to a majority of supporters for the given idea. That is not what the original prompt is referring to so you will be scored down for that exaggeration. Now, you are also missing a summarized supporting presentation for your opinion. The thesis statement should have followed with the 2 reasons that you would be discussing in the body of paragraphs.

By using the incorrect discussion format in the reasoning section, you will be scored down in terms of word count and valid discussion presentations. The examiner will not consider the comparative discussion you presented in the essay and will deduct that from the existing word count. The essay will then fall under the requirement and be scored as an incompletely developed reasoing essay. It is highly likely that you will fail the test based on these reasons.
AntherRR 1 / 4  
Jun 18, 2023   #3
There are a few minor errors in your essay, for instance:
"provision of free-of-charge education"-->"the provision"
"their children learning"-->"children's "
"that causes"--->" which"
There is a lack of connectivity in the essay as well, as you stated your complete disagreement in the introduction, but then discussed both the merits and demerits of the problem. Apart from those minor inaccuracies, your essay is rather well-developed and right on point, though it is a few words short of the word quota. Consider changing a little bit in the introduction to match your supporting paragraphs and meet the needed 250 words and I think your essay will be good :D.


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