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students should take apart in lecture or not? why?



thinhtvdhtm 41 / 96  
Sep 20, 2009   #1
please check for me more detail, my grammar, sentence structures, logic? thank u very much

Some students like classes where teachers lecture (do all of the talking) in class. Others prefer classes where students do some of the talking. Which type of class you like? Why?

In the last few years, there have been many reformation in my own country' education system, and one of the most outstanding changes is in teaching method. In stead of lectures where teachers talk all time, there are now always some presentations made by students during the class. Personally, I thinks these reformations have made education system in my country better, and this new teaching method is not good for me, but for most students.

To begin with, when students attend tuitions, they can have more chance to upgrade their own capabilities. In order to finish the topic which their teachers give them, they have to work in group, read many kinds of different material, collect data for their presentation. When they work together in group, they can learn skill for working together, which very useful for them not just during college, but after school. They also can improve their reading skill and technique to gather information.

In addition, making representation front of crowd help them become more confident. For example, when I was a student at high school, I always became nervous whenever speaking front of class. However, thanks to new teaching method, now I do not mind speaking in front of crowd.

Last but not least, the new teaching method make lecture more interesting for students. In class, students can discuss some things involved subjects, they have more chance to express their own ideas.

essay0405 7 / 16  
Sep 20, 2009   #2
there have been many reformation in my own country' education system

there have been many reformation in my own country's education system
I think you should avoid some phrase like ' last but not least', it is not suitable for an academic writing.
tuanlnc 10 / 36  
Sep 21, 2009   #3
Hi,

In my opion, there are sevaral points in this essay that you can change, correct or improve.

1. It's better to write "present or lecture all the time" than "talk all time" in this case.

2. "this new teaching method is not good for me, but for most students."
This is the sentence's grammar correct, isn't it? I think it should be "... is not only good for me, but ...".

3. What do you mean in this sentence "making representation front of crowd help them become more confident"?

You can change like this "presenting in front of crowd helps them become more confident". Does this make sense?

Hope this helps,

Tuan.
looktor /  
Sep 24, 2009   #4
Hi Thinh,

This is a good essay but the main problem of your eaasy is that you repeat the same word too often, such as ' teaching method'. You should try to use other words but they are the same meaning.


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