Studying history to learn from it - IELTS Writing Task II - Academic

Topic :
Some people think studying from the past offers no benefits to today's life, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information for us.

Discuss both views and give our own opinion.

In this day and age, the benefits of learning from the past has always been an issue of debate to the public. While the supporters think history is a precious material to deepen the knowledge, the opponents consider studying history is meaningless activity. This essay will outline ideas from both views and illustrate why learning history is beneficial.

On the one hand, the protesters of the given notion contend history has a faint function. To be more specific, learning history requires people to memorize dates, names from different historical events and this knowledge are rarely used in the reality. Accordingly, it is more essential to focus on science and technology that bring relevant uses to present and even future. Furthermore, studying from the past is absolutely worth nothing. Particularly, if we actually conclude lessons from past events, history would not be filled with repeated mistakes. However, mistakes were made again in a circulation and that definitely does not contribute much to the present context.

On the other hand, history helps young people understand their own culture and how their culture and country have evolved. For example, by reading historical books, Vietnamese youngsters can know how their ancestors lost blood, sweat and tears to defend their land against foreign intruders. Therefore, a sense of pride and patriotism will also be slowly developed. Moreover, history helps us to avoid mistakes made by politicians or leaders which can cause disastrous outcome on our life. For instance, many economists have used old documents to return to "the great depression period" in 1929, in order to understand the tremendous effect of financial crisis and think of making practical solutions.

In conclusion, there are strong arguments for and against studying history. However, I subscribe to the view that history is a good source of collecting information and dodging mistakes.

@Samathan
Welcome to the forum! Here is my feedback on this writing of yours.

Try to be more precise with your language usage. This will help you have a more enhanced approach to writing, considering the fact that you are working within a very confined word count. Try your best to make the most out of your writing because of this. For instance, in the first sentence/introduction, you could have just said that the benefits of learning have been consistently a public issue. You don't need to elaborate this further, especially since that part should be done on the body paragraphs themselves - not in the introduction.

If you're able to cut down unnecessary parts of writing, it would help you improve the conclusion because you'd have more space for writing. You should discuss here a briefing of your analysis on the arguments against and for the studying of history. This analysis shouldn't be limited to just what your personal take is, especially since it shouldn't be limited to this.

In describing both views, avoid using judging words and focus on supporting each statement from positive perspective. Your Body paragraph 1 would be much better if you focus on the idea about people tend to learn science and technology for the sake of future concern rather than studying history, the stance would be more clear. Then provide the idea with supporting detail or sentence containing the definition, further detailed explanation also related example narrowing from the general idea. This kind of approach mark on sentence to sentence coherence and cohesive. Using template is acceptable but sometimes it shows imbalance on your own writing. Being straightforward is highly recommended.