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TOEFL: Studying at home or at traditional school?



Xiaokai Jin 11 / 19  
Jun 24, 2013   #1
Hi guys, please give me some advice. I'll take the toefl exam soon. Thank you very much!

In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying at traditional schools. Which would you prefer? Use reasons and specific details to explain your choice.


With the development of science technology, it won't be a long time before students can access all the compulsory lessons at home by using technology. However, what the science technology brings to students is really beneficial to their studying or studying at traditional schools is an always better option for students. From my point of view, I prefer studying at traditional schools to studying at home for the following reasons.

To begin with, studying at schools provides more opportunities for students to communicate with each other face to face. To illustrate, when the teacher assigns a group discussion with a very intriguing topic for students in the class, it is very convenient for the students who are studying at home to take part in the discussion. What's more, even though they can join in the discussion in the manner of video conference, they still won't be fully committed to the discussion due to the absence of the enthusiastic feeling. Meanwhile, it is easier for students to come up with some innovative and ingenuous ideas when they are in the heated discussion. Considering they cannot see the expression of each other when they are discussing or cannot feel the excited atmosphere, it is very hard to spark the creativity of them.

Furthermore, studying at schools offers a more efficient atmosphere to students. For instance, when students are studying at home, most of them will tend to relax and play, especially when there is no person overseeing them. But, if students are studying at school, they will see plenty of students studying hard in the library, which will stimulate them to study even harder because in most cases, nobody wants to be a loser. So more and more students want to spend more time in studying in the library, which lead even more students to want to study in order to catch them up. In this case, a virtuous cycle will be formed.

To encapsulate, I am convinced that studying by oneself is not a good choice especially for those who have a very limited self-control capability. In the meanwhile, I also think it will be more fun to study at school where he/she could make a lot of new friends and hang out together in a real life, not in the cyberspace. That is a very important lesson for children to learn. As a result, I agree with the statement that studying at traditional schools is better than studying at home.

MisterWandering 18 / 314  
Jun 24, 2013   #2
However, what the science technology brings to students is really beneficial to their studying or studying at traditional schools is an always better option for students

It is confusing. I guess that you wanted to say that whether studying at home with the aid of technical devices or traditional learning method at schools is more beneficial to students.
OP Xiaokai Jin 11 / 19  
Jun 24, 2013   #3
Hi MisterWandering,

I made a few revisions and here's what this sentence means.

However, what the science technology brings to students is really beneficial to their studying or studying at traditional schools is an always better option for students.

However, students can only benefit from science technology when they know how to correctly exploit these appealing high-tech devices, rather than be excessively obsessed to them.


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