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Style is an attribute which has become a distinctive for sustainability.



hailun11 12 / 12  
Sep 4, 2016   #1
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Some people argue that fashion items cost too much money. Other say that this is acceptable because of fashion is an important part of life. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.


Style is an attribute which has become a distinctive for sustainability. People are with pleasure to be an impulsive purchaser just for taking in design because they think it is essential to shape their style, but others said that it does not make sense. In my opinion, all of them still make sense to me, furthermore there are two main reasons elaborated below to justify.

The main point about fashion is fundamental tool that proclaims who we are, and this is about related to our identities. Firstly, begin at visual communication of our identities through dress. Celebrities for example, it is undeniable that following the up to date fashion has advantage for them. People who work as celebrities willing to spend their much money just for fulfill a style. They will get more attention to build their images on television as much as perfectionist actors. By wearing latest style, celebrities feel more confident in their performance, start from foot wear, clothes, and hat. However, becoming a public figure is all about the packaging what he or she will be showed to play in entertainment stage, so this is important for this community. Once again, this is clothes as identities of person but expensive because of necessary.

Secondly, another reason to show our identities is about as long as we declare our personally. When the first reason the identities for celebrities is expensive, in other hand there is identity which is not much cost eventually. For instance, Indonesia has many unique styles of custom because of archipelago country. As addition, I assumed this is not only Indonesia country but also another country has a different custom also to show what they are identities. We can see with Batik custom, Batik is one of dress nationality from Indonesia. The custom is not luxurious like cost of celebrities' style, but that is elegant and cheap. Even, Jokowi who is number one in Indonesia often to wear Batik when he is going another country for proclaiming the identity also. In fact, people while wearing of Batik is feeling comfortable even though the price is not exclusive.

I assumed that depends on their personalities to make them convenience so far. However, it is cannot see on one perspective only to adjust among of them, because there are reasons to encourage opinion people when they secure with it.

daya93 4 / 5  
Sep 5, 2016   #2
Hi Hailun,

I think your essay apparently out of topic. The question is purposed to cover whether (I will paraphrase to make those more clear:

1. Fashion items cost too much money , in other words fashion often put some unreasonable price. in body paragraph 1, you discussed a lot about high cost fashion and altered identity. You should put more coherence supporting points, such as the reason WHY people thought that fashion is sometimes not affordable.

2. It is tolerable since fashion became important part of people life. Body paragraph 1 actually can cover this arguments, and please note for body paragraph 2 is really lack of coherence for your whole essay.


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