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Summarize article : Creative cockatoos skilfully make tools from different materials


andika08 81 / 80 16  
Nov 16, 2016   #1
There is an activity from Alice Auersperg from University of Vienna in Austria. She saw cockatoo namely Figaro become the smarter than others bird. This is because he splinter a wood and used it to reach the nut from their cage. By the time, it was followed by other birds too. Moreover, she and her colleagues tried to plan a stronger case for cockatoos that will made a special tool. She started with four male cockatoos, including Figaro. Then, each bird just had several times to make tool such as fashion a long and thin to reach the nuts. The result was effective, most of them can pass this test. All in all, Auersperg said from this experiment that they and their friends can see the behaviour of the cockatoo was impressive and they were natural toolmakers.

Source : newscientist
nda18 46 / 81 9  
Nov 16, 2016   #2
hi dika, these are my thought towards your summary

She saw cockatoo namely Figaro becomebecoming the smarter...
This is because he splinters a wood and useds it to reach ...

just be careful to subject and verb agreement..
thank you
yurikeyuri 43 / 61 2  
Nov 16, 2016   #3
Hello, let me give my correction for you

... namely Figaro whichbecome became the smarter ...

their friends can see the behaviou r of the cockatoo that was impressive ...

will mademake a special tool because will is modal and after modal must be V1

thank you
NinaJoesuf25 36 / 66 4  
Nov 16, 2016   #4
There isWAS an activity from ...
She saw A cockatoo namely Figaro ...
ThisTHE REASON WHY is because he splinter ...
... cockatoos that will BE made a special tool.
... to make tool such as fashion a long and thin FASHION to reach the nuts.
..., most of them canCOULD pass this test.
... this experiment that they SHE and theirHER friends canCOULD see the behaviour of the cockatoo [was impressive and they wereAS A n atural toolmakers.
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Nov 16, 2016   #5
Hi Andika, please find a few suggestions below;

- There is anAn activity from Alice Auersperg life, she's from University of Vienna in Austria.
- She saw cockatoo namelynamed Figaro who becamebecome the smarter than others birds .
- This is because he turned a wood into a splinter
- a wood and used it to reach the nut from theirits cage.
- By the time, it wasthe other birds followed
- by other birds toosuit .
- Moreover, she and her colleagues tried to planned a stronger case for cockatoos
- that will then be made into a special tool.
- to make a tool such asfor fashion
- All inOver all, Auersperg
- that they and theirshe and her friends can

There you have it Andika, I hope the above remarks are helpful and for future writing reference, mind that linking verbs as well as the association of your words in your sentences.
ryan31 65 / 96 15  
Nov 16, 2016   #6
hello dika
I have some suggestions for you
hope it helps

... Alice Auersperg from the University of ...
... become the smarter than others bird.other birds.

This is because he splinters a wood and used...

Moreover, she and her colleaguesher colleagues and she tried to plan a (...) that will mademake a special tool.

... several times to make a tool such as ...

thanks


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