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Summarize article : earthquake happen in New Zealand


andika08 81 / 80 16  
Nov 15, 2016   #1
There is an interesting topic about earthquake. Earthquake typically caused by the movement of the Earth's crust. It happen in New Zealand with the power of stress 7.5. By this condition, it can continue to increase the major risk of the earthquake that had been found by John Ristau and their team. Also, there were two people became the victim of this situation. Moreover, it could sign for another disaster such as Tsunami but it not occured. Besides, New Zealand can get the another effect from fault near the interface of the Australian and Pacific tectonic plates. The new earthquake that caused in Autralian and Pacific plates, namely Alpine Fault can make big damage for the states said by Kevin McCue in Central Queensland University. All in all, the latest earthquake is not related to the Alpine Fault that had been state by Ristau.

Source : newscientist
ryan31 65 / 96 15  
Nov 15, 2016   #2
hai dika
I have some suggestions for you
hope it helps

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Also,then, there were two people ...

Moreover, it could be give a sign for another disaster such as Tsunami but it not occuredoccurred .

... fault near the interface of the Australian and ...

... that caused in AutralianAustralia and Pacific plates, namely Alpine Fault which is can make big (...) by Kevin McCue in the Central Queensland University.

... that had been statestating by Ristau.

thanks
Hujjatul19 45 / 70 3  
Nov 15, 2016   #3
Hi Dika, Here is some suggestion for you

It happened in New Zealand with the ...
Also, there were two people who became the victim ...
Moreover, it could sign for another disaster such as Tsunami but it not occured.
Moreover, this matter also will bear other disaster like Tsunami

... that caused in Aus tralian and Pacific plates, ...

Best Regards
akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Nov 16, 2016   #4
Hi Andika.
These are my thoughts to fin alize your summary


Note: You should reread your summary so that you can find the better flow or sense before you display for readers. Honestly, you sometimes make the readers pause to get points of your summary because you suddenly move to another topic. Besides that, you are supposed to pick up proper lingking words to guide the readers.

Keep Writing
GOOD LUCK


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