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TED SUMMARY : 4 WAYS TO BUILD A HUMAN COMPANY IN THE AGE OF MACHINES


ryan31 65 / 96 15  
Nov 10, 2016   #1
Nowadays, human's job is replaced by the robot. This is due to the fact that robot more efficient than human and also human more complicated and difficult to manage. In the organization or company the leader have to build up the beautiful atmosphere in the workplace. After that, it is clear that robot does human's activities and make it amazing. Based on this trend Tim Leberecht launching about four methods to build a human company in the age of machines. Firstly, do the unnecessary, it means although the company thinking about the profit for their business, create no pressure situation in the workplace so that employee's performance will be better. Secondly, create intimacy, it opposite the loneliness. It is talking about build a great circumstance such a create a good relationship between manager and employee in the office it also makes the atmosphere more convenient for workers so that the amount of employee is not experiencing a decrease, even survive until the end of the business since they enjoyed work in that situation. Thirdly, be ugly, it means not only the alteration in the workplace, but also in their appearance such as wearing a wig for the hairstyle so that it will be entertaining one another. The last is remain incomplete, human characteristic involved in this method since making workplace feels at home so that they can organize or socialize with each other easily without any obstacles. In conclusion, although the presence of cutting-edge technology can replace a human in the office, it never replaces those methods.
eve01 24 / 40 5  
Nov 10, 2016   #2
Hi Mr.ryan here is my notes for your summary

(it is better to put beginning sentence)according to the article was mentioned
This trend is due to the fact that robot is .... After that( you can change this words to be : Furthermore, meanwhile..etc ) ,....
... it means althoughthat the company thinking...
... it means that not only (...) the workplace, butyet( you can use yet here since you explain about comparison)

hope it helps :)
Hujjatul19 45 / 70 3  
Nov 10, 2016   #3
Hi Ryan, here is some suggestions for you

... fact that robot are more efficient than human and alsobesides the fact that human are more complicated and difficult to be managed.

... activities and makes it amazing.

... situation in the workplace so thathence employee's ...

... circumstance such a createing a good relationship (...) in the office it also makes the (...) for workers so thatthus the amountnumber of employee is ...

Best Regards
kiki23 37 / 64 4  
Nov 10, 2016   #4
Hi! I have some feedback for you!

... the fact that not only because robot is more efficient than human, but also human is more complicated ...

Based on this trend, Tim Leberecht is launching/ launch (you can use both, depends on the situations) about four methods of how to build a human ...


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