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The table below gives information about the languages that high school students speak at home in one



Thao4real 4 / 7  
Apr 23, 2020   #1

IELTS Exam Preparation - IELTS Writing Task 1



The table illustrates the data about the languages which are used by secondary students in their houses in one US school district. Overall, Spanish is the most common language while Nepalese shares the least.

To describe the information in a few more detail, was on the first place, accounted for nearly 15,110 speakers in 2008. After that, from 2014, there was a significant rise in student numbers speaking this language,with number doubling.At the same time,Korean and Vietnamese were alike that they were both reducing the number of students.

On the other hand, it can be seen that unlike Polish, Nepalese numbers increased dramatically to 438 and turned Polish to be the last place in 2014. Similarly, Chinese and Arabic were simultaneously 4670 and 1320 people whilst Russian represented 1656 students. However, we can see that no other languages can beat Spanish as none of them reach to the fifth of the Spanish.

Jery 1 / 1  
Apr 23, 2020   #2
There is a clear progression throughout the response, with good management of cohesive devices. You organize the information well, but the lack of data to support the descriptions might be a significant omission.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15366  
Apr 24, 2020   #3
Since you did not upload the image with your data report, I will not be able to assess your essay for prompt responsiveness and data accuracy. I am going to be limited to grammar checking only. Kindly remember to upload the image next time so you I can give you a full assessment of the work you have done. Thanks.

You have spacing problems within your essay. Since you are most likely taking the CBT, you have to make sure that you hit the space button after placing a period at the end of a sentence. You need to follow writing rules that indicate the need for a space between the punctuation mark and the first letter of the next sentence. Without the space, the computer indicates a spelling error, which will have an effect on your GRA score due to your inability to properly format sentences.

Without the image, I cannot tell if you were correct to use an uncertainty reference in the description of the speakers. Normally, the data report is based on accurate numerical figures. Which is why words that connote uncertainty of information is not used in Task 1 essays. However, there are times when the so called "guesstimates" are used to indicate an in-between figure where the image does not indicate a numerical figure for the measurement.


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