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Talents; Born with them or not? IELTS



Mommmmo 5 / 15  
Dec 2, 2012   #1
TOPIC: It's generally believe that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It's not a surprise that people will argue over talent. When some superstar musician or athletes shown their great achievement on television will always bring discussion like this: Is he or she really born with talent or successes by sufficient perspiration? Emotionally, I trend to support the idea people born with certain talent. However, both of them have their own fault.

Admittedly, people with talent will have greater achievement then those people who don't have. Even with hard training and study, the difference will still shown in details. Such as the superior singer Michael Jackson, who will never be so successes without his talented voice. In addition, millions of Chinese students are forced to take extra classes for mathematics or piano. If talent could replace with hard work, China will have numbers of mathematicians and pianists right now. In contrast, take Mozart as an example, as one of the greatest musician, Mozart start to compose since he was only 4 years old and most of his great pieces were finished before 30. There should no other explanation than talent is no replaceable for the whole time.

However, it is not saying training is not important. Even though for those genius, certain training and study still requested. Especially at their early stage in the talented profession. Like some wise says: successes = 1% inspiration + 99% perspiration. Even though is a great bless to have some talent, but it will make no difference with ordinary peoples if it been ignored or abused.

dumi 1 / 6795  
Dec 2, 2012   #2
It's not a surprise that people will argue over talent.

It's not just talent that people argue over...They argue over how it is formed.... born with it or trained!
Always keep your alignment with the prompt in the introduction. It is very important because intro is the one makes the first impression about your essay : )


When some superstar musician or athletes shown their great achievement on television will always bring discussion like this:

This has several grammar issues ;
When some superstar musician or an athlete appears on TV , there will always be a discussion such as;
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Dec 2, 2012   #3
You have good points for your essay, but there are a few grammatical errors here and there.

Admittedly, people with talent will have greater achievement then those people who don't have.

People who are born with talent will have greater success than those who are born without it. .... OR...
People who are born with talent will achieve more than those who are born without it.

Such as the superior singer Michael Jackson, who will never be so successes without his talented voice.

A voice is actually not a talent. His ability to sing was actually the talent you are talking about. He had a gifted voice however. But i always thought that MJ was so successful because of his dance moves. ;)

The king of pop, Michael Jackson, would have never been so successful without his talent at singing.

I agree with the fact that talent is something a person should be born with. It can not be given to you in anyway. However by training hard and long you can refine your skill, and if you are anyway talented at it you will succeed very easily. Stress the importance of refining your skill more in your essay. :)
OP Mommmmo 5 / 15  
Dec 2, 2012   #4
dumi

It's not just talent that people argue over...They argue over how it is formed.... born with it or trained!

U are right, I awaired that. Thank you Dumi

Is this sounds better:
When superstar musician or athletes appears in television will always rise discussion about how their talent formed. Is it really something you born with or could be trained?
OP Mommmmo 5 / 15  
Dec 2, 2012   #5
y0_3mma

Or u could say something like The arguments mentioned above are strong enough to convince even the hard-workers who firmly deny the existence of talent.

Can you give me some sample? I'm stucked... :(
valency 8 / 7  
Dec 2, 2012   #6
hi, i think you did quite a good job, but my suggestion is you need a conclusion


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