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TED talk: Non-violence struggle by Jamila Raqiib.



Fadhilahumar91 61 / 68  
Aug 18, 2016   #1
War and conflict are the big problems in the world. Wars and conflicts happened in many countries in the world. Many people care about humanity, but they encourage wars around the world. On the other hand, others who worried about the high rate of violence, but they cannot stop it only by admonishing the people if their ethics is incorrect. Therefore, we should introduce a simple, powerful method to stop the ferocity.

Actually, most people did not used non-violence action to accomplish the conflict. As the result, it improves conflicts between women, minorities, workers and people of different sexual orientation. Non-violence struggle is a technique to reduce misunderstanding among community. Some techniques used to end the problem without battle, such as protest can show what people want, but it does not make a change signicantly.

Non-violence works by dilapidating components, not physically, but it identifies the organization on the opponent what they need to survive. Also, we denied resources of the power such as destructed economy by boycott and challenge propaganda by media. The non-violence activist discovered there are 198 methods for non-violence struggle. For example making protests by extend emblematic to social media. It is not war, but it is a manner to get something more objectively. The greatest hope for humanity is not to condemned violence but making non-violence obsolutely.

akbarmappiare 31 / 445  
Aug 18, 2016   #2
Hi Fadhillah..
Please, you meet these corrections, and those make you sure to be better.


in the world. Wars and conflicts THOSE happened in many
Many A BUNCH OF people care about humanity, but they encourage THE wars around the world.
they cannot stop it only SOLELY by admonishing

Actually, most people did not used COMMIT non-violence action
As the result, it improves conflicts between AMONGST women, minorities, ...
... reduce misunderstanding among A community. Some techniques ARE used to end the problem without A battle, such as A protest WHICH can show what (...) make a change signicantly SIGNIFICANTLY.

THE Non-violence works by WITH dilapidating components, not physically,
Also BESIDES THAT, we denied resources of the power .
The non-violence activist discovered there are CONSISTS 198 methods for ...
For example, ONE OF EXAMPLE IS making protests by WITH extendED emblematic to social media.
It is not THE war, but it is a manner ...
... violence but making non-violence obsolutely ABSOLUTELY.


In my point of view, you have ...
... you still make misspelled words.


OVERALL, IT IS A GOOD EFFORT. KEEP SPIRIT..
HAPPY WRITING
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