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TED Talks : Kitra Cahana - A Glimpse of Life on the Road

kiki23 37 / 64 4  
Nov 11, 2016   #1
Kitra Cahana, who currently works as a photojournalist, ever wonders to escape from her routine boring life while she was a little girl. Her dream is to get to know the stranges living unconventionaly on the road. However, she is never able to pursue her dream.

As time goes by, her profession as a documentary photographer is a new opening chapter in her life since she finally can capture the lives of fellow wanderers across the United States such as young hobos, travelers, hitchhikers, vagrants and tramps. Unfortunately, not everyone appreciates the nomads as it can be seen by the law banned them to stay on the road and the law is now existed in many cities across the United State. In addition, she emphasizes the examples of the laws that harmful for the nomads, yet currently applied. It is illegal now for the nomads to sit on the sidewalk, to wrap their self in a blanket, to sleep in their own car, and even to offer food to a stranger.

What she tries to stress is about the way societies badly think about the nomads as many of the nomads that she knew were already hauled off to jail because of the unreasonable laws currently existed. She also add her points that the society should appreciate the nomads since not all people having the lucky life that we have or sharing the same idea with us or even seeing the world the way that we see.

Source: ted

franklake - / 2  
Nov 11, 2016   #2
I'm not quite sure what the task was but if it is to analyze the talk be careful not to summarize the text. However, if your task was to summarize it provide more detail, try pretending you have to explain the talk to a complete stranger like me who has not heard the speakers ideas before.

Also make your intro a little stronger and narrowed down to what you're going to get into in the rest of your speech. For instance if it's goignt o be about how the speaker felt through out her life, make it very clear straight a way.

try:"... has yearned to escape from her routine and mundane lifestyle ever since she was a young girl. Her dream today is to get to know the stranges of living unconventionaly on the road. However, due to_____, she is unable to ever pursue that dream."

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