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The team of marine conservation agency Oceana Atlantic discovered a Lantern Shark in Mediterranean


andika08 81 / 80 16  
Dec 1, 2016   #1
Summarize article : Polar species spotted in the deep seas of the Mediterranean

The team of marine conservation agency Oceana Atlantic discovered a Lantern Shark in the deep seas of the eastern Mediterranean. They can describe its like the body has 20 centimetres long and glowing bright blue along its spine and belly. By this invention, they feel fascinated about it. Moreover, The leader named Aguilar gave their opinion that an area was natural. They think in the deep sea field was less in biodiversity that make small number of race from the predator. Surprisingly, they found another discovery, it was brightly coloured coralligenous gardens 80 meters down. By this activity, it will give benefit to determine the convenient environment for marine conservation places by the Lebanese authority.

source : newscientist
Pramudia27 34 / 55 2  
Dec 1, 2016   #2
hello andika.. this is my suggestion for you..

... conservation agency OceanaOcean Atlantic discovered a ...
They can describe itsit like the body ...
By this invention, they feel fascinated about it.
... named Aguilargave their opinion that an area was natural. They think in the deep sea field was less in biodiversity ...

i think you should pay attention about your tense. previous sentence, i see that you use present, but in the next sentence, you use past. furthermore, you do not put about time frame. as a result, you should consequent about tense from first sentence to the last.


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