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'technological development' -advanced technology widens the gap between rich and poor



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Aug 25, 2012   #1
Nowadays , the the increasing range of technology has put up a question mark on the healthy relation ship between rich and poor. Even though the advancement in technological field have benefits to both rich and poor ,some people think that it widens the gap between the individual.This essay discuss both aspects of this statement.

On the one hand some people think that technological development can be utilized only by the rich people. This is because they think that, only rich people can afford it. .As a result,they argue that it widens the gap between rich and poor.

On the other hand ,most would argue that a wide variety of technology has helped each and every the individuals in one or the other way. Firstly it is evident that ,due to wide variety of technology ,it has become very cheap. The main reason for this is the every day advancement in the in the technological field. For example earlier mobile was used only by rich people but now it has changed and everybody can use it as a cheap means of communication .As more and more ,technological development has helped the individual in different ways. thereby most people say that it has positive effect on the people.

Secondly it is true that ,technology has made the daily chores of the people more easier.When comparing with the house hold job of the past with the present it is much easier and time saving.Each and every home has there own washing machine ,dish washer , mix y , computer etc which are all the by product of technology .So it is true to say that technological advancement has helper both rich and poor with out any difference.

Considering all these aspect ,although the technological development has some negative effect for the individual ,i am of firm opinion that it benefits both rich and poor people in one or the other way.So it is fertenetjy hoped that our future generation will also be able to enjoy the benefits of technology with out any discrimination of rich and poor.

amitt - / 80  
Aug 25, 2012   #2
"has helped each and every the individuals" check this sentence it irks me.

"For example earlier mobile was used only by rich people " this too

On the other hand ,most would argue that a wide variety of technology has helped this too

advancement has helper both rich and poor with out any difference.
Sentence formation every where are not correct

"Firstly it is evident that ,due to wide variety of technology ,it has become very cheap. " I think the logic is like this," due to lot of competition/survival among companies the electronic items are getting cheaper and cheaper. If you watch BBC then you must know NOKIA mobile group is on the brink of bank-ruptcy. Thus companies always launch products thinking of middle-class as well as upper middle-class.

There are lot of things we can add
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