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Will technology deteriorates our ability to think?



harsha138 2 / 3  
Jul 19, 2013   #1
The world has a significant change over the past years.This change is mainly due to the development in technology.The world is always attracted to new technology.This attraction to new technology has made to develop the technology.The development is quiet good and necessary but it has an effect which is deteriorating our ability of thinking.

Technology has made an instrument that can be used to solve a problem in seconds,for us which the problem might take several days to be solved.But people are using the calculators even for most simple problems.This really is a problem which deteriorates our ability to think.It is absolute that, if we are not even applying our mind for simple calculations,our thinking definitely deteriorates.

The internet is a greatest development in technology.It enriches our knowledge.Internet is a pool of topics where we can find info about anything.But besides these advantages, it really has a part in deterioration of our thinking.If we are assigned a work,the first thing we will do is searching the particular work in internet and copying it.Where goes our knowledge and thinking if we are depending on internet and copying some others work.Even a small assignment given in the schools, the students are copying from the internet.It is really a huge deterioration of our thinking.

Another invention that is a revolution is sensor.We can even control a machine with a remote.It is a great invention but besides it is making us lethargic and lazy.The sensors are now even used in fans and lights,not even making us to move a little distance to switch them.The smart t.v, which we can control by motion of hand and movement of eyes. At least for the old televisions we used remote,so at least our fingers will be in movement.But now due to smart t.v we would become more lazy.

Technology of course deteriorates our thinking but it has brought the change.It made a human to think beyond limits.How amazing it is that the u.v rays can be converted to sensors.It is really a great invention.Technology saves our time,it saves our power and it fulfill our needs.

From the above ideas I can say that technology is useful when it is used in limits.Technology is beneficial but it should not be used excessively.

Naveen 54 2 / 4  
Jul 19, 2013   #2
your good at essay while reading your essay it says you have great command in english..

you have small mistakes check it out.! :)
tuhin_75 1 / 1  
Jul 19, 2013   #3
Technology has made an instrument that can be used to solve a problem in a seconds,
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jul 19, 2013   #4
First, I wish to request you to post this type of essays into "Writing Feedback" forum. Also, try to include your prompt and the purpose (whether GRE, IELTS or TOEFL)in your essay so that we exactly know how to align your response with the task requirements. That helps you earn good feed backs :)

The world has a significant change over the past years.This change is mainly due to the development in technology.The world is always attracted to new technology.This attraction to new technology has made to develop the technology.

.... Let's have a look at these introductory lines. All of them talk about technology and its significance to the world. However, your prompt talks about how it affects our ability to think. This aspect is given fairly low priority in your introduction. Try to align your writing with what your prompt requests. Read your prompt carefully and understand what it asks for. Then introduce the prompt to the reader with a better alignment to what it really means.


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