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TEDX Finding work you love dont Follow your passion



BAMS14 18 / 21  
Sep 23, 2016   #1
Finding work you love dont Follow your passion

Most people in the world hard choosing career, because it is complexes problem. Rightnow many people Focuses on wrong thing, they can not find out the best way. Majority people have same strategy to got best career, such as following their parents and following money to get passion.

On the other side, several society have different way, likes find out passion match first before get success and fullfilling career after success. Based on the research academic during three years, That is reserved with reasearch data, particularly data can give us information that presentation people have passion does not match with their career. Generally People get different career with their passion. From the data we can see what we should do to get best career. We should doing valuable thing and avoid useless activity. focus on valuable thing anything that can give us advantages to improve skills. Doing important activity and focus to three part, firstly explore skills, secondly get good flexible skills, and the third solve pressing problems. Those are clear and concrete way to get work you love it. For example, the boy doing valuable thing such as reasearch, study hard, business, etc. without leave their passion to get best career.

justivy03 - / 2265  
Sep 23, 2016   #2
Hi Bams, I believe this is my first review of your essay and I hope my insights and additional remarks help.

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There you have it Bams, as you can see, there's quiet a lot of work to be done in your essay. What I'm trying to understand is that, you seem to find your sentences to be complete when they're not,in a complete sentence, their's quiet a lot of factors to consider, one of them are minor details such as the punctuation marks, the spacing and most importantly the idea that you are trying to convey to your readers. I hope you find the above examples of modifying your essay is helpful in your revision and should you need further assistance do let us know.


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