IELTS essay - Teenage or Adult life - which brings more happiness in life?

Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest of our lives, while others believe that adult life brings more happiness. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Happiness is a stage where you relish yourself forgetting all your worries. This may occur during any part of one's life. Some people say it happens during teenages and few argue that it is the adult life which brings happiness. I would say that teenage holds the best moments in which one 'lives life to the fullest' with enthusiasm than the adult life which gets you into the 'cloak of responsibility'.

Adolscence is the fantastic time period to delight every activity or occassion. From thirteen to nineteen is the golden period of life which you cannot get back to. Concentrating to learn new things, having adventures, taking risks and building up new relationships. For instance, you learn new things and have a pleasant time with the maximum friends around and rejoice the whole tenure.

On the other hand, some people argue that adult life is the happiest stage of life. One gets a chance to decide on their own, spend their own money etc., Whenever you are stuck amidst of problems, your spouse is along to help you around. For example, if there is a guy who lost money in his business, his wife can always step in to solve the financial hurdles by taking up a new job where the guy's life is secured.

Having discussed about both the sides, I would say that adult life always means responsible life. When you get into being more responsible, sometimes the level of happiness comes down. Hence, teenage years are the most happiest times of our lives.

I find this definition has some issues. Happiness is actually not a stage, but a mental status. There are no grammatical errors here, but I find it difficult to conceive the meaning of your sentence. :(


... I feel happiness occurs moment to moment... rather than during specific different phases of time :D
You write very well and I think you can aim at a very good band :)

This may occur during any part of one's life.

be careful with the singular and plural

I would say that teenage holds the best moments in which one 'lives life to the fullest' with enthusiasm than the adult life which gets you into the 'cloak of responsibility'.

in my opinion, you do not need to put 's' at word 'moment'

Concentrating to learn new things, having adventures, taking risks and building up new relationships

where is the 'verb'?

Thanks a lot for the comments dumi and fikri :)

Here is the updated one,

Happiness is a fascinating state, where you relish yourself forgetting all the worries. This might occur during any part of one's life. Some people say it happens during teen ages and few argue that it is the adult life which brings happiness. I would say that teenage holds the best moments in which one 'lives life to the fullest' with enthusiasm than the adult life which gets you into the 'cloak of responsibility'.

Adolescence is the fantastic time period to delight every activity or occasion. From thirteen to nineteen is the golden period of life which you cannot get back to, where you get to concentrate on learning new things, having adventures, taking risks and building up new relationships. For instance, you learn new things and have a pleasant time with the maximum friends around and rejoice the whole tenure.

On the other hand, some people argue that adult life is the happiest stage of life. One gets a chance to decide on their own, spend their own money etc., Whenever you are stuck amidst of problems your spouse is along to help you around. For example, if there is a guy who lost money in his business, his wife can always step in to solve the financial hurdles by taking up a new job where the guy's life is secured.

Having discussed about both the sides, I would say that adult life always means responsible life. When you get into being responsible, the level of happiness comes down. Hence, teenage years are the most happiest of our lives.

Happiness is a fascinating state of mind, where you relish yourself forgetting all the worries.


Actually, your essay should be more focused on happy periods of life rather than giving more emphasis on happiness. They are slightly different.
Everybody goes through happy and sad phases in life. Some people say that teenage years are the happiest period in one's life and the adulthood deals with more challenges that does not allow one to enjoy life.

ok got it .. understood the difference between your writing and mine :)

learning new things is a common phenomenon throughout one's life. The biggest advantage during teenage years compared to adulthood is that it is free from serious responsibilities. So you've got time to enjoy life without worrying too much about your commitments.


If you think teenage life is the happier one, then keep supporting that opinion. Talking about the opposite opinion would not help you convince your reader.