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Since I am a newcomers on IELTS, I do really need lots of insights for my writting subjects.
Critics and comment are very welcome!
Q : Some people think that young children should be allowed to do paid work while others think that this should be illegal
Discuss both opinions and give your opinion
In the globalization era, the notion of employing the teenagers in paid work is debatable in several countries. Some people convince that this is a credit value, whilst others neglect it and assume that it is not allowed. In relation to this, I highly likely believe that allowing the teenager to work and get paid is acceptable. However, there should be some considerations to be concerned with.
Firstly, it is certainly true that the teenager's decision for having a paid work is not a poor decison at all. It would definitely add a few fresh insights about work life, which will be worthvalue for their forthcoming era. One of the good example is when they should deal with a few aspects of works such as maintaining a company's reputation, learning the practical and social skills, and they would even have another income, apart from their parents. All of these values are unusual subjects that they would never receive in the formal school.
However, some people also clearly believe that doing a paid job could affect their focus on studying and their physically as well. The adolescence is an era for studying and creating a memory alongside their friends. Doing chores, playing sports, and even being punished together are a period that they would love to recall it later. Therefore, instead of having paid, they certainly should focus on their study life and having a job, afterwards.
In my opinion, both of this views would be acceptable, depending on several condition. Taking an example for those whose their families need a financial support. It s highly make sense that having a paid work would rise their families income no matter what. In contrast, in work life, it would be too risky if they enter it with no clear backgrounds and have not finished their study, yet. They would be out of focus, since they are not fully developed at all.
As an conclusion, having a paid job or not is a decision which should be considered carefully because, the one that matter is how much our love is for what we do.
It is 350 words long because I am still confuse in several aspects.
1. In discussion and give opinion type, do we have to create a conclusion since we have creat our opinion? (As far as I am concerned, we are allowed to give an opinion as well in the conclusion)
2. If we need an conclusion, can I put it into a same paragraph with my point of view? Or divide them into two paragraphs?
3. Do we have to state our position about one view in introduction?
That is all. Really appreciate your support guys. GBU! :)
Since I am a newcomers on IELTS, I do really need lots of insights for my writting subjects.
Critics and comment are very welcome!
Q : Some people think that young children should be allowed to do paid work while others think that this should be illegal
Discuss both opinions and give your opinion
In the globalization era, the notion of employing the teenagers in paid work is debatable in several countries. Some people convince that this is a credit value, whilst others neglect it and assume that it is not allowed. In relation to this, I highly likely believe that allowing the teenager to work and get paid is acceptable. However, there should be some considerations to be concerned with.
Firstly, it is certainly true that the teenager's decision for having a paid work is not a poor decison at all. It would definitely add a few fresh insights about work life, which will be worthvalue for their forthcoming era. One of the good example is when they should deal with a few aspects of works such as maintaining a company's reputation, learning the practical and social skills, and they would even have another income, apart from their parents. All of these values are unusual subjects that they would never receive in the formal school.
However, some people also clearly believe that doing a paid job could affect their focus on studying and their physically as well. The adolescence is an era for studying and creating a memory alongside their friends. Doing chores, playing sports, and even being punished together are a period that they would love to recall it later. Therefore, instead of having paid, they certainly should focus on their study life and having a job, afterwards.
In my opinion, both of this views would be acceptable, depending on several condition. Taking an example for those whose their families need a financial support. It s highly make sense that having a paid work would rise their families income no matter what. In contrast, in work life, it would be too risky if they enter it with no clear backgrounds and have not finished their study, yet. They would be out of focus, since they are not fully developed at all.
As an conclusion, having a paid job or not is a decision which should be considered carefully because, the one that matter is how much our love is for what we do.
It is 350 words long because I am still confuse in several aspects.
1. In discussion and give opinion type, do we have to create a conclusion since we have creat our opinion? (As far as I am concerned, we are allowed to give an opinion as well in the conclusion)
2. If we need an conclusion, can I put it into a same paragraph with my point of view? Or divide them into two paragraphs?
3. Do we have to state our position about one view in introduction?
That is all. Really appreciate your support guys. GBU! :)