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IELTS TASK 1 : Temperature in Kolkata graph


SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
May 4, 2014   #1
The climate graph shows the number of temperature and precipitation in Kolkata during a particular period of a month.

Overall, the temperature in Kolkata stabled moderately while the downpour take a high percentage in the middle of the year.

As per data, by under 50 mm rain occurs in the first quarter of the year, it gradually increased before rise sharply to more than 250 mm in June. After a short peak period by more than 300 mm downpour occurs in July and August, it has almost halved to 150 mm in October. However, Kolkata region experience the driest period of the overall month by closely to zero rain happen in the last two months.

A closer looked to the curve line, Kolkata temperature' stands the coolest condition in the beginning's year. Appearing 20 Celsius degree it experiences a slight increase to nearly 30 Celsius degree in May. The figures leveling off in the average of 25 degrees before gradual fall to nearly 20 degrees in the end of the year.




dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
May 6, 2014   #2
The climate graph shows the number of temperature and precipitation in Kolkata during a particular period of a month.

This graph may be a little bit more advanced compared to what you get in other similar tasks. However, your introduction needs lots of improvement :(

The bar chart and line graph present the readings of monthly precipitation and temperature in Kolkata during a particular year.

As per data, by under 50 mm rain occurs in the first quarter of the year,

As per data, during the first quarter of the year, the precipitation level is kept under 50 mm.
andial 21 / 48 3  
May 11, 2014   #3
Sekaaaaarrrr.. , good morning or you probably look at my word in the afternoon.. :-)

The climate graph shows the number of temperature and precipitation in Kolkata during a particular period of a month.

what do you mean this 'a particular period of a month'. It is obviously not appropriate knowing it is in a particular year that is why there are 12 motnhs given. :-)

Overall, monthly temperatures remained stable during the given year while maximum precipitation occurred in the summer of Kolkata, from June to September.

I am not sure that the tenses used is right in this occasion. As long as there is no exact year mentioned, we have to use "simple present". It is because the chart has a tendency that the information pointed here is valid in any case.


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