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TOEFL_Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing and industry are more



stellastella 18 / 25  
Dec 14, 2011   #1
Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view?

Nowadays there are some issues which many countries and nations are concern about that. Two of the most important of them are rate of increasing population and endangered plants and animals. From my point of view although endangered animals are important, human needs should be considered more.

Firstly, day by day population is increasing, so human needs for food is increasing as well. We need farmland to grow crops such as wheat and corn, and there is no doubt that without food people cannot alive for more than some weeks. Therefore, farmlands are vital for human life.

Secondly, people need shelters to protect themselves from mother nature such as wind and flood and wild animals ,so they need land to build their houses on it. Dwelling is one of the most important human needs after food which is undeniable.

Finally, human need some crucial things to continue their life, and most of them are industrial such as medicine. Therefore, some lands should be assigned to industry. Todays life has some difficulty which become comfortable with the help of industry.

To conclude, the population of endangered animals are less than people's population, so they do not need so much land that people need. I would maintain that nowadays human needs for farmland, housing and industry because of increasing population are more important than saving land for endangered animals.

princedynasty 15 / 57  
Dec 15, 2011   #2
stellastella
Thank you for your comment on my first essay at essayforum
Now it's my turn :D although I'm not really helpful
I think that instead of using construction Nowadays_Firstly_Secondly_Thirdly_Finally, you should use less fundamental connectors like therefore, consequently, for this reason, moreover, furthermore, as a result.etc..

Mother nature seems to be positive and general => maybe natural disasters are more suitable.
:D:D:D


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