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IELTS - WRITING TASK 1 - Top internet purchase categories by country



Trang Nguyen 1 / 1  
Sep 17, 2013   #1
The chart below shows the different types of goods and services purchased online in Australia, Canada and the United Kingdom in one year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart illustrates the variable types of items bought online by Australia, Canada and the United Kingdom in a year. It can be seen that UK people spend a great deal on online purchases.

One of the first thing to note is that toys, food and drink and financial services are required with the smallest amount on the Internet. For example, less than 30% of consumers getting these items compared with approximately 40% of buyers getting the others. Another thing to point out is that most of customers spend their money on music, computer equipment and books. More specifically, above 30% of shoppers pay for these goods and services in 3 countries. In addition, it should be noted that, there is a large proportion of purchasers in the United Kingdom, which is greater than 60% buying music and books on screen. Moreover, in Australia and Canada, the ratios of people make book purchases by computer are the same percentage, which is 45%


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dumi 1 / 6795  
Sep 18, 2013   #2
Well.... I suggest you to have this structure for your response to this task;
1. Introduction of the graph -

The bar chart illustrates the variable types of items bought online by Australia, Canada and the United Kingdom in a year.

..this is it!
2. Overview - talk about the major trends
3. Details - Here you should discuss details with given statistics and patterns.
OP Trang Nguyen 1 / 1  
Sep 18, 2013   #3
Thank you very much, your passage seems to be better than me, I have difficulty in expressing my ideas and varying the vocabulary, I will learn from my experience


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