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Topic: Are we defined by great challenges or by everyday challenges?


Life is just like a journey which we try to explore our inner part by devising solutions to every problem we confront. And every long journey just starts with small steps like the process of understanding and defining individual always comes along with solving everyday challenges.

Thorough our human history, our system of society has been set up with the belief that the man is just worth being extolled when he achieves something enormous, marvelous. In the Stone Age, the man was defined by how many preys he could hunt per day. In feudalism, the man was only highly admired if he could be a hero saving thousand of lives such as heroic character like Hercules or be as astute as Aristotle. Obviously, those who have defined themselves by making a huge change to our society such as Bill Gates, Thomas Edison, and Einstein should be applauded for what they have achieved but how about other normal people who run the whole society? Can an unnamed teacher who tries to inspire his students through every thoughtful lesson define himself? Does a patient who struggles with cancer until the last minute have to win 7 times Tour De France in order to define himself? We do not know when there will be great challenges for us to define ourselves so why not try to do best in everyday challenges to let other people around you know who you are?

In literature, we have many novels which extol many normal people who just do normal jobs with everyday challenges, not the great ones. For instances, In "The last leaf" of O'Henry , the author did not pay too much attention to the artist named Berhman, who is very normal and according to the author "a failure in art". Although, little mentioned in "The last leaf" of O' Henry, Berhman seemed to be the most important character and inspire the readers the most. Not famous and talented as Picasso or Leonardo De Vinci, not painted any masterpiece of arts but in his late of life, Berhman just painted a normal leaf. Just a normal leaf, which is very usual or maybe worthless to every one of us, yet, in fact, it saved one life. The challenge that Berhman confronted was not great one but it was flagrantly meaningful. And with just with "A leaf" Berhaman did define himself greatly.

A person can define himself not only through great challenges but also through everyday ones. If he can not define who he is through small tasks of his life, how can he let other know who he is through greater ones? Just complete each little task life gives you then you will have a chance to define yourself through big ones.

Note: Please have a look at my essay and take time to give me some pieces of advice to improve it ^^. Thank you a lot

Jul 24, 2010   #2
Since the topic is "Are we defined by great challenges or by everyday challenges" it seems like they want you to pick one option and focus on that. Your essay adresses both about evenly, though well. Maybe you can try focusing on one more than the other?

You might want to explain how the leaf saved someone's life.

Overall, you had very good ideas and explained them nicely. I also liked that you had an allusion to literature because it adds greater validity to your point.

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Jul 26, 2010   #3
Here is another idea about that intro:

Life is just like a journey in which we try to explore our inner selves by devising solutions to every problem we confront. And every long journey just starts with small steps; similarly, the process of understanding and defining individual always comes along with solving everyday challenges.

What do you think of that? Or something like it...

I like your idea. You should express the idea in a single sentence (not too long) and add it to the end of the first paragraph.

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