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IELTS Topic:Environmental issues"international Cooperation vs National participation"



xyx0905 16 / 49  
Apr 13, 2012   #1
Environmental problems are too big for individual countries and individual people to address. We have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is at en international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, the discussion about the protection of nature environment has become a controversy. Therefore, some start to believe that the residents and authorities at national level are unable to tackle the environmental trouble, whereas the perfect approach is the international collaboration. Generally speaking, this is not the case. 50

It is recognised that the international cooperation is a preferred option under some circumstances. Firstly, it is able to settle those complicate environmental issues such as climate change. Kyoto Protocol Agreement, for example, establishes a standard internationally to require different countries to reduce their greenhouse emissions. In this case, a single nation's effort is much less significant than a group contribution. Secondly, the international alignment has the financial advantage to develop advanced technologies to address the environmental matters. This is because most of those exploitation are long term developments which increase the financial pressure for a country itself. 98

However, it is undeniable that the participations of individuals and local government are indispensable. According to the distinct environmental conditions in different regions, those particular governmental policies are more practicable than the international synergy. For intense, China, a country with huge population, supermarkets are imposed to place a charge of using plastic shopping bags in order to lower the white pollution nationally. Moreover, citizen's involvements are always valuable and considerable in their society. Those practices such as applying recyclable cutlery instead of disposal ones in a family event and purchasing an environmental-friendly vehicle for travel are significantly alleviate the resource shortage and air pollution. 104

In conclusion, it is convincing that the international consociation is useful in some situations. However, countries are usually not alike where the contributions at national level cannot overlooked. 28 / 280

alirulez 3 / 21  
Apr 13, 2012   #2
Hi,

I always enjoy reading your essays. Your essays are compact with correct structures and does not meander in terms of its topic. A good sense of vocabulary, with 3 or 4 complex sentences in every essay. I have been through the model essays ranging from 5 to 9 band, so I think this one can score 8 band (just my opinion)

Good luck..
OP xyx0905 16 / 49  
Apr 13, 2012   #3
Hi allrulez,

Thank you for your message. The way I practice my essay writing is three step: 1. draft a first writing within 40mins actually, stop at the end of time ends, see what I can writing in 40mins. 2. leave 1st draft for about 1hr during this hour I will practice a reading test, when I come back I will writing my 2nd draft according to my 1st draft. 3. on the second day, I will read my writing loudly and feel if I am the read, am I able to understand what the writer was delivering. After 2nd reading of my own essay, I will finalise my 3rd draft which is the one I post in this forum. I have prepared about 55 topics covers 8 general areas. Hopefully I can pass my IELTS test soon.

Cheers
alirulez 3 / 21  
Apr 14, 2012   #4
Great efforts I would say !!!

Any good books you can suggest. I have been through all the version of Cambridge IELTS: 1 to 8.
OP xyx0905 16 / 49  
Apr 14, 2012   #5
Hi Alirulez,

I just post my message on another member's IELTS topic about how I think what I should do in order to achieve a decent score and I recommend go for IELTS TRAINER. I found it was very useful and the questions were bit difficult to answer. I think CAM 1-4 were bit outdated. That's why I recommend IELTS TRAINER, this book represents the future IELTS exam's trend. I have a plenty of practice materials but they are all e-version (PDF) which I have download when I was in my home country. Some of them contains chinese explanation but questions were all in english. If you are interest, I can email you some of then, I have lots of reading practices and writing topics.

Cheers
alirulez 3 / 21  
Apr 14, 2012   #6
Would really appreciate if you can mail me the pdf practice materials for reading, writing and listening if you can.
my mail id is ali_rulez999

Regards,
Ali Sayed
OP xyx0905 16 / 49  
Apr 14, 2012   #7
Hi Alirulez,

I am sending now. big file, takes a while, cheers. This is a reading practice,10 tests, 30 passages. The examiners explanations are in Chinese, i am sorry but the questions were pretty useful.

Cheers


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