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Tourism as a Crucial Key for Promoting Cultures and Increasing Local Income



abdasyari93 9 / 17  
Sep 16, 2016   #1
Entertainment is one of essential needs for human's lives to kill the leisure time with their lovely family. It is generally known that everyone has different ways to spend their holiday by enjoying breathtaking views and stunning landscapes. Exploring tourist destinations is one of the perfect ways to deal with their time, so that is why tourism should be enlightened as an important aspect in each country.

Although tourism may become possible local traditional and cultures to be endangered, it has some other benefits for every states. Therefore, tourism should be developed in a number of countries due to the fact that it promotes local cultures and is able to increase local income.

First, as a popular leisure activity, tourism brings tourists to get new experience different cultures when they go on holiday to explore several places of interest. Furthermore, they can open their minds and learn to speak other languages. Second, tourism attracts tourists to spend their money in which helps to improve standard of living in local tourist attractions. Then, local people can increase significantly their income through local crafts, services, and foods. In addition, tourism creates job opportunities in accommodation and entertainment.

In conclusion, as a vital entertainment, tourism has several merits owing to its positive impacts. However, developing tourism should be maximized by native people and government to introduce and protect local tourist destinations and cultures.

mem77 62 / 93  
Sep 16, 2016   #2
Hello abdasyari, nice to see your summarize about tourism and also it is an interesting topic for us. But i have some advice to you to make your essay more good.

On your essay, i seen that too much repetition such us tourism, tourists, cultures. i think you have to find an idioms word about it to make your essay more colorful and also to make the reader is not bored with yours. And also, for make sure about your essay, i think it should be good to use present tense.

i think that's enough for me and thank you very much.
Rinnegan45 - / 35  
Sep 17, 2016   #3
Hi, there!

got some additional tips for you.

Entertainment is one of "the" essential needs

every states

Although tourism may become possible local traditional and cultures to be endangered => I still kind of bewilder with this sentence.

the rest of the essay is good just try to keep it fascinating yet simple.


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