Trafficking in human beings - My 500-words essay

I didn't finish it yet, I think I will add the rest part tomorrow, but I need your help now. What do you think about my essay? does it sound interesting? where are mistakes? I will appreciate you for assistance.

Trafficking in human beings - this phrase has become notorious in the world in recent years. About 150 years ago slavery was abolished throughout the world, when people realized that all are equal in their rights and infringement of them in relation to a person of any gender, status or nationality is a crime. It would seem now living in a modern civilized humane society, we should forget about this inhumane purchase and sale of human beings forever, but reality says that this activity not only reached alarming proportions, but continues to flourish. The UN estimates that 12 million people around the world - victims of traffickers. Most of the victims of transnational trafficking in human beings - are women who are sexually exploited for commercial purposes.

Russia is a country of origin, transit and destination for trafficking victims. Overall gender inequality, lack of equality in the family is expressed in a high prevalence of domestic violence and family problems. Hard living conditions, housing problems, and alcoholism - all this is also the root causes of trafficking and growth in.

Also now extremely unfavorable situation on the labor market, limited employment opportunities, young professionals, especially girls, when you try the device on the well-paid jobs are almost always doomed to failure. Therefore, the choice is left and must either agree to any proposed work or go to another country for work and looking for a more comfortable life. Besides the demographic situation in Russia is more than sad, now the girls do not have to hope for a successful marriage, as it was before, it is necessary to take care of yourself, and in many cases not only of yourself, but after the defunct marriage of a child. Women who dream of a better future, a weakness for the promise of work abroad as nannies, housekeepers, waitresses or models. This work traffickers turn into the nightmare of prostitution, of which there is no exit.

Combating this crime as a kind of slavery, violation of human rights and a manifestation of discrimination against women in the modern world requires the combined efforts of the international community and the public in each country.

Hi Tamara! Is this the 'choose an issue of international importance and explain why it matters to you' essay? It would be helpful to know the prompt in order to advise you on this piece.

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Hi, thank you for comment!

My essay is for admission office of Gender Studies Faculty. I would like to show with it that I am really interested in this issue and it also happens in my area and I am going to help people to solve this problem. Something like that.

good essay, but you should have amore personal touch to it and how it effects the life of them

Particularly successful in this matter have made the United States. You can feel that they are working on this issue. Upon receipt of the U.S. J1 visa summer of 2007 to participate in the Work & Travel program I was given a brochure with a list of precautions when hiring, the consul advised very closely acquainted with this list. It really made me think and be more cautious when hiring.

I am very concerned about this issue, because it may be involved are my friends. One of my friends my age after unsuccessful search for work after college decided in whatever was to leave the country. Her choice focused on Spain. It is not without means to leave, she turned to the agency, which offers a job as a waitress and assume all costs for visa application and an airline ticket. Employees of the agency said that it will be met at the airport and help with housing and start-up costs. Without doubt they were traffickers who wanted to engage in the business of sexual exploitation of victims. The girl knew about it, but despite this the dream of a carefree life was stronger, and it avoided the appointed meeting at the airport, the benefit of that in Spain it was ready to meet Russian girlfriend.

My classmate was one of the most successful students on the course, she gave great hopes and questions of our teachers I am ashamed to admit that she too had gone to Spain in search of better living conditions. But she did not give either his family or friends a chance to stop her.

I think I will change the structure of my essay, also I need to cut it. But now I'd like to know your points about my writing abilities and how good it is. Please help me to avoid errors also. Thank you in advance!

After studying a number of publications on this subject I made the following conclusions. Non-governmental organizations are doing a lot to solve the problem of trafficking in human beings in our region. But they need to work more closely with government agencies and the media. According to the survey population of the city of Vladivostok rather poorly informed about the problem of trafficking in general, and in the region, in particular.

Practice shows that even young people with higher education tend to leave the country, where they were born and grew up. We need changes in education system. It is necessary to set up young people to strive to improve the life around them, rather than trying to leave the country by any means.

Together, we must develop equitable society, the rights of women, improve their situation.
We need regional program to combat human trafficking, based on the principles of gender equality and human rights.