"True beauty" is the good humanity

Everyone does have their own view of "True Beauty." As far as my opinion, my true beauty is the good humanity.

I remember the day of my old school that we had discussion on the true beauty topic. Many of my friends were arguing that their true beauty is a girl with a sexy body and a nice shape. During that period, we all were young and we have no idea of these things. Only we can see was beautiful lady on a heavy make-up.

As we grown up, we now realized the true meaning of beauty. Beauty doesn't count as an external looks only. The main part of the beauty is the one's internal behavior.

For example; Nelson Mandela, Ghandiji, The Dalai lama, Martinlutha King and more. They are the one whom i do present as the "True Beauty". These are the people who severed their nation no matter what happened to them. Because of their true inner beauty, this young generation people eager to call them as a true beauty.

hey everyone,
looks like my essay has a lot of grammer mistake ... could you please check it and explain me well.
thank you.
Need help! truely!

Jon, that difficulty with "the" is a tough one. It is one of the reasons I often tell people to practice reading English aloud a little each day.

However, I don't think it is necessary to spend LOTS and LOTS of time perfecting one's English, because a new kind of language is forming in this globalizing world. Language changes naturally over the course of time... interesting stuff.

Thanks, Jon, I see you must be spending lots of time here!

I remember the day at my old school when we had discussion on the true topic of beauty. Many of my friends ...

During that period, we all were young, and we had no idea of these things. All we could see was a beautiful lady with heavy make-up. As we grew up, we realized the true meaning of beauty. Beauty doesn't involve external looks only. The main part of the beauty is the one's internal behavior.

For example; Nelson Mandela, Ghandiji, The Dalai lama, and Martin Luther King were all beautiful. They are the ones whom I do present as the "True Beauty". These are the people who served their nations no matter what happened to them. Because of their true inner beauty, the people of this young generation are eager to call them "true beauty."

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Great start on your Essay

I believe true beauty is part of person personality going beyond caring for other people.

Thank you Jonathan, I am trying my best to improve my English writing. I don't know why i am always confuse about the grammer. I know present, past and future. Also the past perfect...,...,... and the rules of grammer. But whenever i try to write English, they is always grammer mistakes. Can you please give me some tips that will improve my writing.

Thank You!

I think your grasp of English is really good actually, but it just takes practice

Tips on writing: For one, I know from trying to write in French, just keep writing. The more practice you get, the better you get at it.


they are* :]
Also, remember that when you write, keep singular with singular, past tense with past tense, etc.
If you have to review English conjugations, go for it~

And another thing about writing in general, think about the ideas that you want to write about. Say them out loud, make an outline ( make a point, support it with some evidence, then show how that evidence supports the idea/point ) This will not only help with writing essays, but also with making any type of argument.